Talk:LeBron James/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Red Phoenix (talk · contribs) 01:55, 27 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Comment Is this discussion being restarted? As I said in GA2, I renamed the "Personal life" section "Life outside basketball", since one's "Personal life" would not include business deals and appearances on TV shows. Throughout Wikipedia, people are using personal life sections as catch-alls for material that doesn't fit elsewhere, even if that material describes the subject's work life and life in the public eye. I just don't think that's a practice we should encourage. Zagal e jo^^^ 05:22, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I like this idea.--Ktmartell (talk) 13:12, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Also, this change was reverted, but that "and" is grammatically necessary. If you don't like multiple "and"s, then the sentence needs to be reorganized or split. Zagal e jo^^^ 05:56, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks!--Ktmartell (talk) 13:12, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I was actually issued a message by the nominator requesting that I review the article again, because I failed it before after no changes were made after a week on hold. That being said, an excellent job has been done on revising the article and fixing the issues that I brought up in the GA review.  That being said, I think we're in good shape and all ready to pass this article.  It would appear that the crux of the issue with the Personal Life section is simply the title, in which case I would find "Life outside basketball" as acceptable, though I'm not so sure that would pass on an FA nomination.  In my opinion, I would think the endorsements and such might work best in the section about his career because it is relevant to his career, but I'm not picky.  It ought to be a good discussion topic going forward, and likely one I think you guys can resolve with further expansion in ascending to FA status.  As it stands, however, all of the GA criteria have been met with the paragraph mergers to meet MOS:PARAGRAPHS, and the fix of reference links, verified through checklinks.  Good work!   Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 17:16, 27 May 2013 (UTC)