Talk:Lisa Hannigan/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
On Hold

Lead

Since leaving him behind - ouch! I am not sure that accurately descibes the relationship. Can you change this to something a little more nuetral.

I see "behind" has already been removed by an ip. Consider "Since leaving Rice's band" ... But it already is better without the dig.

Is Jason Mraz a big enough star to merit having his praise mentioned in the lead? Consider leaving this vague as "fellow musicians" and allow the detail to fall the core of the article.
Hannigan's other passions - unless she has called them her passions directly, I think this needs to be toned down, too. These two sentences seem to jump around a bit. Maybe acting & theatre in one sentence and another for the OXfam Fair trade stuff.

Early life

She developed her singing I think this sentence would read better if it were split into two. One driving, two cassette. I wikilinked Compact Cassette as it may not be a commonly understood term anymore.

Rice

',collaborating with him for six years My preference would be to make this its own sentence. Your call.
Is fractitious a word?
Is it necessary to point out that Rice had a bad relationship with Paul Noonan and David Geraghty? Seems like a subtle way of calling Rice a prick. It also doesn't appear to be supported by the cite (reluctant pop star).

It wasn't intended like that at all. It was meant to be seen as a pointer to Rice's past with his previous bandmates – to show that he wasn't necessarily picking on Hanngan as an individual but that he had musical differences with other musicians too.
they argued over whether or not their CDs should come packaged in recycled paper (Rice insisted upon it, the rest of the band "couldn't give a shite")
--➨♀♂Candlewicke _S^T_# :) 19:55, 19 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. I changed Paul Noonan and David Geraghty --> other band members. The source doesn't name these two & there were three other members of Bell X1 (I believe). The article also covers, not specifically, his general demeanor as "something of a contrary bugger at the best of times." So I think it's fair to include as you have stated. Mitico (talk, contribs) 15:45, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Solo

Housed in a sleeve that she did the needle-work for herself' -- What does this mean?
- A record sleeve. Needle-work is knitting... there is a picture of the album cover on the Sea Sew page... --➨♀♂Candlewicke _S^T_# :) 19:59, 19 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I reordered the sentence. It is less poetic now, but clearer I hope. Mitico (talk, contribs) 15:45, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

although it is currently available to citizens of that aforementioned country on iTunes. --Is the sentence a legacy from before the official release date? "Aforementioned country" is awkward, but I think this isn't relevant and will be stricken.
- A relic from that "aforementioned" time. --➨♀♂Candlewicke _S^T_# :) 19:59, 19 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
and Best Irish Album at the Meteor Music Awards[22][23] in January 2009, - the cites should be at a a punctuation mark (either at the comma, or end of the sentence).
with Hannigan's artistic prowess... - again, here I would make a separate sentence. This is significant so it deserves its own sentence. Non-Irish may not even be aware of this tax free creativity program, so a little background would be nice too. But can "prowess" be toned down some?

I changed scheme to program. Scheme is probably the proper term, but here in America it has a negative connotation. Mitico (talk, contribs) 15:45, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References

The Cite news/cite web templates have author name field (last, first). I would recommend using these fields since if/when the weblink goes dead the information would be more easily retrieved.

External links

a Damien Rice memorial - I have only heard the term Memorial used for someone who has died. Is this term commonly used this way in Ireland?

Overall the article is decent and very close to meeting the good article criteria. I have made some suggestions. If you disagree with anything I have written, let me know. If you have any questions or concerns about this review, let me know. I will be watching this page, so if you have any comments this is the best place to communicate. Thanks, Mitico (talk, contribs) 13:23, 19 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

After re-reading the article and making some minor adjustments (noted above), I believe this article meets all the criteria of a good article. Great work Candlewicke! Any questions, let me know. Mitico (talk, contribs) 15:45, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]