Talk:Los Angeles Lakers/GA2

GA Review
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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some issues I noticed, as well as some suggestions for improvement:


 * There is also some cases of improper comma usage throughout. Commas should be used to separate clauses that can stand independently of one another without the conjunction. So... "During the 1993–94 season the team ended up only winning 33 games, and missing the playoffs for the fourth time in franchise history." should be "During the 1993–94 season the team ended up only winning 33 games and missing the playoffs for the fourth time in franchise history."
 * Did i fix it, or are there still more?  Blu  e  Red  19:30, 25 October 2008 (UTC)


 * The lead doesn't comply with WP:LEAD. The lead should be about three or four paragraphs summarizing all the main points of the article.

I'll give the authors of this article seven days to make improvements. Nikki 311  16:37, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Some work has been done, but I still see quite a few problems that have not been addressed from my list above. I'll give the article a few more days in the hopes that some fresh eyes will have a go at my suggestions. Nikki  311  17:07, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I put strikes through the ones I thought were completely taken care of. The ones without strikes still need some work. Nikki  311  01:38, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I've expand the lead and fix some comma issues.— Chris!  c t 23:53, 28 October 2008 (UTC)

Sorry, I've been busy with some other projects. I'll check through the article again in the next couple of days. Nikki 311  00:03, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Ok. I finally had a chance to look back through the article. I eliminated quite a bit of wordiness and peacock phrases. Keep an eye on new contributions to make sure wording is neutral. For example, saying a season was good is biased...just state the facts. I've decided to pass the article because I believe it now meets all the GA criteria. Great work! Nikki  311  22:41, 30 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks— Chris!  c t 22:48, 30 October 2008 (UTC)