Talk:MIND MGMT/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 00:33, 30 May 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Sorry you've had to wait so long for a review, and thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:33, 30 May 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
Looking at the lead, it looks like this article may be in need of at least minor updating ("and will receive a second printing in April 2013.") to meet GA. Before continuing, I'll ping your page to see if you're still active here. Thanks again for your work on this. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:37, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I've addressed three that jumped out at me, and have some additional sources and updates I hope to add this weekend. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:55, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks! My editing time may be limited till Monday or Tuesday. My daughter's having a minor surgery tomorrow; nothing serious, but I'm planning to pamper the heck out of her. I'll pick it up and give it a top-to-bottom read and commenting then, though. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:36, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

Okay, snatching a little time here. Here's a few issues to get you started:
 * "Although originally assisted by Diana Schutz, Brendan Wright was named the series editor" -- was Wright originally assisted by Schutz? Or Kindt was originally assisted by her? If the latter, this should be rewritten.
 * "The series will return to a monthly schedule in January 2013" -- update -- did this happen?
 * "Writing for iFanboy, Paul Montgomery said "“Kindt’s aesthetic won’t win over every reader, [but] his watercolors lend perfectly to the story’s themes and tone”." -- this appears to need an inline citaiton
 * The film section should be rewritten so that the statements won't go out of date in the next few months or year (per WP:REALTIME). Consider phrasing like "As of (date), it was in preproduction" or "On [date], it was announced that Ridley Scott would produce".
 * "has shared the complete outline for the story with them" -- who is the "them" here--Richardson and Goldberg or Scott, Richardson, and Goldberg? Or the company generally?

Thanks again for all your work! -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:03, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
 * All have been addressed. Still need to update the plot, but everything else is updated. Hope the surgery goes well! Argento Surfer (talk) 21:54, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Already on the other side of it, and all is well. =) -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:13, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Oh, and just let me know when your update is finished and I'll take a last look. This is probably close to promotion, but I have a few last checks to do when you're ready. -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:35, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
 * All ready to go. Argento Surfer (talk) 11:09, 2 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Wouldn't Lyme, Meru, Perrier, Dusty, and Duncan be a "quintet" rather than "quartet"? Or does one of them stay behind?
 * Doh. Yes, they would be. I've fixed that and included more reception and the film into the lead. Argento Surfer (talk) 19:07, 2 June 2013 (UTC)

Checklist
Two small notes above--otherwise, this looks ready to pass. Thanks again for your work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 15:07, 2 June 2013 (UTC)