Talk:Madeline Tourtelot

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 29 January 2019 and 7 May 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Jeni Emery.

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Review (so far) by Jillian
Work on organizing the info better. Reference other Wiki pages for help.

1960's and 1070's should be 1960s and 1970s - adding an apostrophe makes it possessive, no apostrophe makes it plural.

commas, periods and other punctuation need to go AFTER the superscripted hyperlink to reference material.

Good use of hyperlinking to other articles!Sickcakez (talk) 17:17, 3 March 2018 (UTC)

Review by Maddy
Really good and thorough start. I think you could expand the career section a little bit... or you could start a new section where you talk about her films. What are the themes she cares about, what's her style like? Since she collaborated a lot, you could talk a little more about how her career was nontraditional in that sense. Mmddyyyyy (talk) 16:20, 5 March 2018 (UTC)

Review
This is a good start. The lead needs significant work. What makes Madeline Tourtelot significant? Provide an overview of her career, from film critic, to filmmaker, to early Chicago gallerist, to educator. Note especially her work with significant composers like Ed Bland (with whom she also worked on "The Cry of Jazz") and Harry Partch. This could be it's own section, with descriptions of these projects and her role.AmyDeer (talk) 03:26, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

Review by Jeremy
Really great start! Impressed with your proficient formatting skills and a dive into your subject matter. I think the lead could be expanded, as other commenters have noted, but think you are well on your way. I also think you could find a way to contextualize the scope and the impact of Madeline's career in a more overarching sense. Was Madeline's position as a woman in a male-dominated industry significant? What was the nature of her collaborations (i.e. who influenced who? who maintained control?) These are some aspects of your article that I think could use a little more attention. Looking forward to seeing more!

-J — Preceding unsigned comment added by Scottie19182018 (talk • contribs) 04:55, 7 March 2018 (UTC) Scottie19182018 (talk) 03:09, 15 March 2018 (UTC)

Scottie19182018 (talk) 04:19, 15 March 2018 (UTC)

Copy Edit
good organization!

In the lede perhaps saying she was a prominent female figure rather than she became, or if you prefer became perhaps an explanation as to how she became prominent, is there something distinctive about her style? Is she notable because of the collaborations?

Smith College is in the Northeastern US, not midwest.

“She went on to become a significant contributor to Chicago's art scene and avant-garde filmmaking in the 1950s and 1960s[1], as a member of Cinema 16,

Scottie19182018 (talk) 04:18, 15 March 2018 (UTC)