Talk:Marielle Heller

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Carrot47. Peer reviewers: LK2001, Mich mi.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Peer review from LK2001
Hi Carrot47,

Overall, great job on the article! I have a few notes:

1) The introduction contains useful information, but I would actually break this up into separate sections. As it is, the introduction contains most of the article's biographical information. Assuming there is not a lot of biographical information to work with from your sources, I would keep the introduction brief by retaining the most notable fact (that she is best known for The Diary of a Teenage Girl), and move everything else into sections such as "Education", "Personal life" and "Awards and distinctions", for example. Even if there is not a lot of information to add to these sections right now, you currently have at least one notable piece of information for each, and with the section headings in place, you (or other editors) can expand them as more information becomes available. The section headings will enhance the readability of the article.

2) I like that you gave "The Diary of a Teenage Girl" its own section, since it is Heller's most notable project to date. The section is structured well, as it provides information about the film itself, background information about the graphic novel, stage play, and development process, then about Heller's motivations in writing the film. However, there are a few missing citations in this section (and in the intro as well) that need to be added.

3) Good job creating the table for the Filmography; the information is presented clearly and it's useful to have the hyperlinks included within the table.

Great work!

LK2001 (talk) 05:51, 16 March 2016 (UTC)LK2001