Talk:Michael Larson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 23W (talk · contribs) 23:56, 6 September 2014 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

I'll have this shortly; if not this weekend, then likely the next one. Thanks again for reviewing Off the Air (TV series). 23W (talk · [ stalk] ) 23:56, 6 September 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments
Interesting article. I can tell you've mined most everything from the documentary; good work. If you can, though, I'd give it a copy edit or two. It's clear to follow, but some of the expressions seem out of place. I may have more to say later. 23W (talk · [ stalk] ) 08:29, 13 September 2014 (UTC)
 * Per MOS:NUMBERSIGN, use of the number sign (#) should be changed to "no."
 * I think it's ✅, but please feel free to fix any I may have missed.
 * Can "+ ONE SPIN" be typed as "and one spin"? It looks usual in the running text, and I'm not sure we'd stylize it according to the board anyways. Same with "PICK A CORNER".
 * Direct quotation needs a citation immediately following it, per WP:MINREF.
 * I'm not sure this quote should end with an ellipsis. I think it can end with a period (following the last quotation mark).
 * ...  ...   Need citations also.
 * , and
 * ...  References?
 * as sources would be rather difficult to locate, and the claims unnecessary.
 * "Deadly" here sounds like a word to watch; I'd rephrase. Same with  and.
 * Remove, per WP:REALTIME.
 * as sources would be rather difficult to locate, and the claims unnecessary.
 * "Deadly" here sounds like a word to watch; I'd rephrase. Same with  and.
 * Remove, per WP:REALTIME.
 * Remove, per WP:REALTIME.
 * I think I've hit everything here, so I'll wait for a second run-through if necessary. Let me know if anything else needs to be fixed. Thanks for the review! --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:09, 13 September 2014 (UTC)
 * Won't be necessary; pass! Here's some book sources that may be nifty if you decide to take it to FA:    . 23W (talk · [ stalk] ) 20:10, 13 September 2014‎ (UTC)