Talk:Monsoon of South Asia

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Article suggests that the monsoon winds were first noticed by sailors in Arabian sea, but other references claim that knowledge of the monsoons date back much further, to harrapan (sp?) civilization. Not sure on this. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dgwooster (talk • contribs) 15:18, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

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This should be renamed as the Monsoon of Indian Subcontinent
If monsoon of South Asia is monsoon of Indian subcontinent and around why not call it so? Indian subcontinent is the popular English use anyway. There is no hostorical use of word South Asian Monsoon. It has been Indian Monsoon anyways. To include all other countries in the region it should not be called Indian monsoon but Monsoon of Indian Subcontinent. ~rAGU (talk)

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(I wrote this feedback directly to the editor before I realized the article had alread been added. But most of this still applies.)

This is a quite a good job of pulling theories together without showing bias. There's a huge amount of work here, and there's no question that some information is quite useful.

I'll give you a variety of concerns, so you can tackle improvement from different directions?

1) You're aware that some material significantly overlap the existing Monsoon article? You should expecially consider the section Global Monsoons > Asia. Your material would displace that, to some degree or another. That's an opportunity, but also a challenge, because the people who wrote that material will doubtless have an opinion on their work being displaced. Or on it being qualified. That would be good news for your writing process, actually, except that the number of Discussion comments and recent edits suggest it may be months before you get significant input.

2) Read all the comments on Monsoon's Discussion page. Doing this is often a good indicator of what kinds of issues attract people's attention. (Also note the names of individual editors you may want to contact for an opinion.)

3) In general, your article reads like a university paper -- comprehensive. Wikipedia is more oriented toward fragmented information. As an example, this kind of language is "off-topic" for Wikipedia, and also smacks of Original Research "India, historically an agrarian economy primarily..." On the other hand, that same paragraph (buried far down in the article) gets into one of the most important concepts of the topic which is, I think, that much of India's crops are not irrigated, and depend on the irregular monsoons. Your article so far is strongest where it summarizes theories: Probably you should consider dropping other material, or writing another article about it. (Or add to existing articles.)

4) In contrast to the quite orderly and relatively scientific presentation of the later article, the opening is dense and wandering Original Research. You want the "lede" paragraph to be extremely focused, clear, and uncontroversial. Snappy, brief, and tight English. I'm not presuming to give you the actual words, because I don't know the subject, but your opening should sound a lot like other articles that have been reviewed and are at least "C-Class". E.g.,


 * Indian monsoons are those strongly influenced by the tropical winds blowing from the Indian Ocean onto the Indian landmass from June through September. Since XX% of India's crops depend largely on monsoons, and catastrophic flooding often accompanies monsoons, the causes and the prediction of monsoons are intensely studied. Minister Pranab Mukherjee called the monsoons the 'real finance minister of India'."

(The last sentence is a little bit of a "hook" to draw reader's interest.)

5) Stick with basic English, and avoid words that might be considered WP:PEACOCK. For example, as a professional editor, and a long-time Wiki editor, if I saw this sentence I would instantly rewrite it:


 * "Any fluctuations in the time distribution, spatial distribution or quantity of the monsoon rains may lead to conditions of floods or droughts causing the agricultural sector to adversely suffer."

to abhi


 * "Agriculture suffers from floods and droughts caused by variable monsoon timing, distribution and rainfall quantities."

Going even further, you might consider dropping the sentence entirely, since it occurs after several thousand words -- if the reader doesn't understand those basics by that point...!

I hope some of this helps. I think your biggest challenge -- from this point -- will be fitting the article into existing articles and material, and that you want the opinion of the WikiProjects as soon as possible.

Yours Cordially —Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.210.208.107 (talk) 21:13, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Edits to Article in 2016
I have noticed that the entire section under Mechanism of Monsoons was plagiarized from a website known as LearnNext. I have made an attempt to paraphrase the first paragraph and cite the website the content is from using a footnote. I added some information towards the end of this section about the onset of the monsoon and the wind travel, to add as better understanding of the monsoon's movement. I have cited my source using a footnote. I linked the words Bay of Bengal, Indian Peninsula, and Sea of China to their wikipedia pages for anyone who needs a better geographical understanding of what I am talking about, not many people know their location of the top of their head. Towards the bottom of the page, I added information about the effects of weak monsoon rain of the Indian economy because I think the reader should know that despite the strength of monsoons are how grand the rainfall has the potential to be, sometimes the country does face drought and has to deal this issue. I cited my source using a footnote. I also linked Inter Tropical Convergence Zone to a wikipedia page because I don't know what that is, so I don't expect the reader to also. Gives them access to more information. Yetinubu (talk) 19:18, 15 February 2016 (UTC)

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Pakistan affected by the monsoon 103.167.162.13 (talk) 14:40, 21 July 2022 (UTC)

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