Talk:Nicole Holofcener

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Great article! Really well referenced.

Just a few notes:

Introduction:

1. Put release dates next to movie titles in brackets

2. See if you could maybe expand the intro a little bit? Prof. Horak said "robust" introduction. Not sure how you could do this.. maybe summarizing some later points form the article?

Life and career:

1. Instead of saying "her stepfather" just say "Joffe"

2. On the subject of the stepfather: Did he produce ALL of Woody Allen's films? Could maybe say, "Joffe was working with Woody Allen as a producer" or "often worked with Woody Allen as a producer." Something like that.

3. Release dates next to all movie titles unless mentioning the date in the sentence, or the movie title *with the date* was already written in a previous sentence.

4. The sentence "The films Holofcener has worked on are highly regarded as indie films," seems redundant. Perhaps integrate it into the previous sentence, something like, "Despite the financial success of her feature length films, Holofcener is viewed as an indie filmmaker and is held in high regard by critics and the film industry at large." Or however you prefer.

5. I would say "realism" is more of a stylistic choice than a theme

Feature Film Career:

1. Release dates next to movie titles

2. What is "Cold Feet" about? Since there is no link

3.When did she direct the episodes of Six feet under? If you can find them, naming the titles of all the television episodes she directed would be great.

4. Television episodes and series under the Feature Film section? Maybe create a new section for television career, as it seems robust.

Again, great job!

Peer Review No. 2

Quite an informative article, however, there are some concerns, mostly format-wise.

The introductory paragraph is rather well formatted, though hyperlinking words such as “director” and “screenwriter” to corresponding Wikipedia pages would be very helpful for readers unfamiliar with the roles and responsibilities of those positions. Additionally, you should briefly list some of the television works she’s been involved with such as Sex and the City, Unbreakable Kimmy Schmidt, and Orange is the New Black, the same way you list a couple of her film works.

The “Life and career” section is very well informative, and it has a great deal of interesting and revealing information about Holofcener; however, the structure and formatting of it is a little jarring and difficult to follow. For instance, you begin the first paragraph talking about where she was born, and you finish it with her work as apprentice editor in 1986, but then, in the second paragraph, you begin it by talking about her first experiences as a child. It would be considerably easier to follow if the events organized detailing her life were in chronological order of when they happened to her, as it’s then easier for the reader to understand her life and influences through that clearer context. Maybe begin by dedicating the first paragraph to her upbringing and her parents, then the second to her studying at Columbia, which then leads into her television and filmmaking career. As well, there are some topics, such the generic style and themes of her films which may be better suited to the “Feature film career” section, or, perhaps, an entirely separate subheading focused specifically on that.

The “Feature film career” section is nice, and has a lot of connecting links and information, but perhaps you could elaborate a little more in-depth about the productions themselves. For instance, in the paragraph about her feature film debut, Walking and Talking, you have only the sentence: “The film was critically acclaimed.” Perhaps summarize the general critical consensus, and have a quote or two from favourable reviewers who wrote about the film. Additionally, try and have a brief summary about what the films are about and deal with, particularly if they relate to those themes, such as realism and self absorption, that you mentioned earlier. It would help in illustrating her continually re-visited themes and interests.

Finally, perhaps give a few polishes on the format and grammatical elements of the article. At times it feels like the sentences don’t flow particularly well and are short and abrupt, as if they’re bullet points in sentence structure. Also, it makes it easier to read, and more aesthetically pleasing, if the citations are at the end of the sentence, rather than in the middle of them. On that note, make sure that the citations are before the periods as well. Lastly, make sure that you do a proof-read for spelling errors and inaccuracies. In your last paragraph, Holofcener’s show is called One Mississippi, and “Mississippi” is spelt wrong. As well, in the sentence after, you spell Tig Notaro’s name wrong twice. Getting rid of those errors will go a long way in making the information clearer and more credible.

It’s a well done article. You’re subject is really interesting, and there is a great deal of information provided. A clearer, chronological, re-structuring of the article will go a long way in making it easier to understand and read, as well as some re-workings of some awkward phrasings and format. Though, overall, it’s a very well done and researched article.

- Cincinnatus.Seen — Preceding unsigned comment added by 99.245.235.16 (talk) 02:53, 10 October 2015 (UTC)

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