Talk:Ohio Organizing Collaborative

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The Ohio Organizing Collaborative seems like a great example of an organization that relates to the subject of inequality. This is something that I think most people don't know about, so I think it fits well with the wikipedia project because it's specific and can be easily researched. So far, I think the way it looks like you're going to organize your page looks good. Each of the eight OOC programs should stand alone as separate categories with headers in a separate section. I think explaining further the issues of inequality in Ohio and the practical things OOC is doing to combat inequality in Ohio will be a great addition to the piece, and I suspect that is what you'll elaborate on further when you describe the eight programs. Adding citations from OOC sources, articles written about OOC and statistics relating to the issues you are discussing will be a great way to support the article and is nonexistent so far. Finally, double check some editing issues such as the capitalization of "organization" in the first sentence and "self-Interest" before you finish your first draft.Kjacks48 (talk) 21:15, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

Aaron, It looks like you are off to a good start. This is an interesting topic and appears clearly linked with inequality. However it is a work in progress. I did not find any references on the page. You have clearly done some research on the topic but for an entry that needs to be reflected. You may want to add a "history" section to give some background for the organization. This should include references. If you have any pictures of the building that would also be nice to have uploaded. You also should add some background to the "campaigns" section. As it stands you only have the names of the campaigns. A reader would like to know how these campaigns are linked and what is their significance in the grand scheme. Best of luck,Travis Watson User:Twatso19 (talk) 11:52, 14 October 2015

This is an ok start. The sandbox needs some research though and some attention to stylistic and grammar issues. The Ohio Organizing Collaborative is a form of community organizing. Should it go into a community organizing article? Also, what does the literature say about community organizing and inequality? 131.123.61.2 (talk) 15:44, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Aaron, you've made some great improvements on the article. I like the organizational style of it a lot. However it still is missing citations. You make a lot of factual assertions in this article. Each one of those needs to have a citation. For instance, you list who the leader of the group is. That should be cited by perhaps looking at an "about the group" section of their website (if any). You should put in some scholarly sources that discuss the OOC or look for newspaper articles about the group. These sources will help your page blossom and will give you some great information that can be added. This article still seems kind of bare bones and finding sources will help flesh out some of the substance. Great work, good luck. ---Travis Watson User:Twatso19 (talk) 18:03, 21 October 2015

I think it's Kirk Noden not Nick. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mcassell04 (talk • contribs) 23:05, 8 November 2015 (UTC)

Aaron, I think you have started a great article! I like your organization and the number of links and categories you have. I am not the best at grammar so unfortunately I don't think I can help you on that front but I can tell you what kinds of questions and suggestions I still have after reviewing your article. What has the OOC as an organization been able to achieve? How are they funded, private, public, or both kinds of donations? Are there any specific organizations that work with or expressly against the OOC? I would assume that your research paper is about mass incarceration with special regard to racial inequality so I think it would be extremely helpful to have some of the statistical reports from the study that shows racial inequality. Not that I don't believe it's the case however saying that there is inequality and showing the amount of inequality may make all the difference to the people who will read your article in the future. Overall great work so far and I look forward to reading your final page! Mijepoi (talk) 13:29, 10 November 2015 (UTC)

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Campaign Information
This article is really good, I can see how you came up with this topic, as it relates to our Inequality class. The only critique I would have with this article is there should be a little more information in the Campaigns Section. There should be a couple of sub heading explaining the diffeent campaigns. This will give more Information about the OOC, and create depth for this article. I think is is really well written and will be a helpful article on the Wiki site! — Preceding unsigned comment added by DarrienW2 (talk • contribs) 02:35, 12 November 2015 (UTC)