Talk:Ormia ochracea

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 August 2019 and 4 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Joshkim wustl. Peer reviewers: Rebeccaspell, OstapKukhar, Agandhi7.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 05:51, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Stub Comments

 * I don't think "machine gun" can be used as a verb, and even if it could, I don't think this would be the appropriate place to use it.


 * The third paragraph is a direct copy from the sound localization article (or vice versa).

Snottywong 23:40, 22 April 2007 (UTC)

Moved some of the information from the original lead paragraphs into the appropriate category. Changed the wording of some sentences. Added a lot of information about the fly's parasitism, including the means by which the fly locates the host and the fly's effect on host behavior. Added additional detail on the fly's directional hearing ability. Used nine additional references and added citations. Wanted to add more images but was unable to find creative commons licensed pictures of the fly.

Joshkim_wustl 22:44, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

17 October 2019 Very nice work on this article! It has a very captivating lead section. I especially liked the inclusion of information on the fly’s use in sound localization research. My one major comment is that information should about more categories should be added. Even if this information is unavailable at the time, headings could be added with a sentence or two describing that no studies have been done on that topic. The only edits I made were fixing minor grammar issues. I also added a few hyperlinks (parasitoid, Gryllus, instar, and a few species names) to clarify some of the sections with lesser-known words. Thanks for contributing!

Found this article to be facinating, especially the hearing mechanism. Seems like this fly is mostly known for its hearing. Ideally there would be more information on ecology, habitat, and behavior but I undertand that this information is hard to find since most research focuses on hearing. I edited a few minor things here and there and made the wording more concise. I also added some links. I understand that the suggested sections do not work well for this fly but sections like Mating, Interaction with Humans, and Food resources would add a lot to this article. Overall very well written (OstapKukhar (talk) 04:07, 18 October 2019 (UTC))

The article contains a lot of interesting information, and is well-researched. However, the organisation and citation could be improved. I have re-organised the content, but this could be further improved by extracting further relevant information from the sources. The article would really benefit from sections on the habitat and range of the fly, and a description of its physiology. Perhaps some information from the intro section could be moved into the content of the article.Agandhi7 (talk) 04:33, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

I am reviewing this for our last assignment. When I edited this page, I changed some grammatical things, such as shortening run on sentences, removing unnecessary commas and fixing mis-matched tenses. I also hyperlinked a few words. I also have some recommendations. First, I recommend that you take out the half sentence on discovery in the overview. I don't think it is immediately necessary to this fly. Also, when you write "usual way" in the overview, that 1) needs a citation and 2) is biased. Maybe you could say, "as it is for humans" or something like that. I also recommend that you add more information to the Distribution section because you had more information about it in the Overview. I think the list of cricket species is not necessary as it is too specific. Overall, a good article with a broad range of information.Hannahwhite97 (talk) 22:23, 30 November 2019 (UTC)

In response to the comment above about how writing the "usual way" is biased, directional hearing is calculated in a similar way in almost all animals with tympanal ears, not just humans or mammals. I have added a citation, as suggested. joshkim_wustl (talk) 01:55, 03 December 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.11.150.142 (talk)

This article contained several interesting facts about the fly, including its sound capabilities. I went ahead and combined the life history section in to one paragraph because the second section was only one sentence so it looks more organized. I also added in some pictures and hyperlinks. Overall, there could be more sections added that describes the fly, as much of the information is about sound.Y.shiuan (talk) 02:05, 4 December 2019 (UTC)