Talk:Otokonoko Zuma/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 19:16, 31 March 2022 (UTC)

Review

 * Taking on review Mujinga (talk) 19:16, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
 * earwig copvio check is 0% (but then all sources are in japanese)
 * pic has an adequate free use rationale and is relevant
 * sources appear reliable and article is neutral and stable, no original research
 * sources appear reliable and article is neutral and stable, no original research

Comments on prose

 * "Premise" could be titled synopsis or plot, then split out from that the themes into its own section. then the references could be in themes - what do you think? I can see you have several GAs in this area already
 * Chapter 1–14 = Chapters 1-14
 * "Nico Nico News described him as attractive and full of what makes otokonoko characters charming, with the contrast between his gender and his appearance,[10] and NLab appreciated how characters respect Yuki's gender and treat him as a man regardless of his femininity and how he is the wife.[3]" - too many "and"s, suggest breaking sentence up
 * What is NLab for those who don't know? A magazine, a website?
 * Shogakukan is a company so "its" not "their"
 * " volumes in 2017–2020" suggest "volumes between 2017 and 2020."

Overall
Overall this article seems pretty good but lacking some structure per Manual_of_Style/Anime_and_manga and as opposed to other manga good articles such as Classmates (manga), Samurai Champloo and Cobra (manga). For example, these all have a section on characters which would be very useful here since the volume synopses are otherwise quite confusing for me eg i wondered who is Kido on first mention. Perhaps a theme section would be helpful as mentioned above.

That's all I got on a first sweep. I'll put the review on hold Mujinga (talk) 19:35, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi and thanks for the review. I've been sick and simultaneously very busy with work and haven't been on Wikipedia, but I wanted to apologize for not giving you any response. I'll try to get to this in the next few days.--AlexandraIDV 18:51, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Oh feel better! Thanks for the reply, if we are communicating every few days then I have no problem with the review taking a bit longer than usual. Especially when my comments were pretty short to begin with. Mujinga (talk) 07:43, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
 * no updates in two weeks makes me wonder if it's advisable to close the review and then you can renominate when time suits? I can give it a few days and if I don't hear back, I'll do that. Hope all is well, obviously real life concerns come first! Mujinga (talk) 17:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, I think that would be best. I'll implement your suggestions when I have the time to and will re-nominate then.--AlexandraIDV 21:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * OK! Feel free to ping me about it if you like Mujinga (talk) 15:29, 20 April 2022 (UTC)