Talk:Paravaccinia virus

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I appreciate that this is just a rough draft, but that being said, there's a lot of grammar issues you need to fix in this. The third sentence in this page should start "This infection" instead of just "Infection." You should also change "get infected with" to "contract," says exactly the same thing and is not nearly as cumbersome. Also you are missing the hyphen in "double-stranded." "Seeked" is not a word and should be replaced with "sought." "Feed back" should be one word instead of two. To be honest, I'm actually not a fan of that entire sentence in general, consider "Consultation with a veterinarian or even the owner of the cattle from which the infection originated may provide valuable feedback considering paravaccinia virus's higher frequency in animal populations." Change the comma after "area" in the first sentence of "Cause and Prevention" to a semicolon and remove the comma from the third sentence of that same section. In the Research section you used the wrong form of "their." The Diagnosis section is not clear in my opinion, particularly the first sentence. Is treatment not sought because its so common that people already know how to deal with it themselves or because its so rare they don't know what it is? Also that last sentence in "Cause and Prevention" is in desperate need of citation. I can understand the difficulty you must be having finding stuff about this, but I really do think your page would benefit from more information in pretty much every section if you can find it, as it stands now what you have is pretty bare bones. This last change is pretty much the most minor thing imaginable, probably only like a .1 out of 10 in importance, but I don't think I've ever seen any cited article where the footnote marker is placed before the punctuation instead of after it. Aside form the one grammar thing I mentioned, I really liked your abstract. It says everything it needs to and takes exactly as long as it needs to say it. Unfortunately I don't know how to fix it so it's above the table of contents, mine already had that formatting done. Sorry...

Ricov53 (talk) 06:49, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

Good start
The problem with your table of contents is that you placed your abstract above a very important (EDIT BELOW THIS LINE). If you take a look in your edit source you will see that your abstract is just above those words. Moving the abstract below that line should solve your problems with it. If you need help with this then just find me in class. In the abstract there is a sentence with 4 citations. Is that necessary or can the be broken up into separate parts of the abstract. I would also make a subsection for history. Possibly add a brief description of what the virus causes. Otherwise I think the abstract contains good information, It just needs some minor editing which the other user has already suggested. Mechanisms is pretty short, I would add to this section in your final draft. The symptoms section is still being worked on. In the causes and prevention section I would add more sources. There are also some grammatical errors that should be revised. I would continue working on all the unfinished sections and make sure that you are keeping good citations on everything. Rocko1569 (talk) 15:06, 12 November 2015 (UTC)Rocky

Sweiner02 (talk) 23:05, 12 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Drop the heading. The full page will add its own, and this just makes your formatting confusing.
 * It seems odd to describe 2% of livestock handling humans as "few". That seems like a lot!
 * Mechanism: How does this virus cause the symptoms described? What does it do?
 * You have some great information, but it needs organization, links, citation and more detail in a lot of place, especially mechanism and symptoms.
 * In a quick google scholar search, I found three studies addressing humans in the past 10 years and I didn't go past the first page. These should be included.
 * You have some citations listed at the bottom that aren't cited. Why?
 * Linking is solid in the first few sections, then falls off, just make sure you bring the rest up to speed.
 * This is a good start. It needs more detail and organization, but you're going in great directions and I look forward to reading it.