Talk:Parineeti Chopra/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Titodutta (talk · contribs) 20:32, 6 April 2013 (UTC)

Comments part 01
I have started readin the article and have read first three section (lead an next two). Here are few questions and comments --Tito Dutta (contact) 20:32, 6 April 2013 (UTC) - As an actress?
 * Later, she signed a three-film deal with the company.
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- When? Add As of
 * Chopra has several projects in production
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- Who has two daughters? Reena or Parineeti?
 * Chopra's mother is named Reena, and she has two brothers
 * I can not see any change! Provide diff!
 * Tweaked. Prashant  talk  06:39, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Tweaked. Prashant  talk  06:39, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

- Rewrite it mentioning giving some context about the quote.
 * She had always wanted to become an investment banker: "I've always been a really good student and wanted to become an investment banker in London"
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- The article does not mention when she went abroad. If the information is available, add it.
 * In 2009 she returned to India
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- Not sure, what does "filming" mean here- directing, acting? And when?
 * Priyanka (who was filming Pyaar Impossible!)
 * Partially alright! The second question )the minor issue "when") still unanswered!
 * That is mentioned. In 2009, she returned to India and moved to Mumbai. Also, Pyaar Impossible! was released in 2010, which means it was filmed in 2009. Prashant  talk  06:35, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
 * That is mentioned. In 2009, she returned to India and moved to Mumbai. Also, Pyaar Impossible! was released in 2010, which means it was filmed in 2009. Prashant  talk  06:35, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

- What is PR team?
 *  introduced Parineeti to the head of the PR team
 * ✅ and linked it.
 * Alright! but, public relations team of what? "of the studio" or something similar can be added!
 * Added

- Give some details about the quote!
 *  "I realized I never understood acting and my respect for the profession increased"
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- It seems YRF. But, you can mention it here since it is the beginning of a new section!
 * to resign from her executive position with the company
 * Alright!
 * Alright!

- The article does not mention if she joined any acting school! Any information available?
 * she wanted to become an actress and decided to resign from her executive position with the company to attend acting school.
 * She didn't join any film school. But, there is no other information. Prashant  talk  06:39, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

- Add descriptor like Bollywood director Manish Chopra.
 * Maneesh Sharma suggested signing Chopra to Aditya Chopra

- Which officer?
 *  the officer refused

- Tense conflict, the next few sentences are in past tense. - Similar conflict!
 * The film describes how three girls who are tricked...
 * Chopra played the boisterous and feisty tomboy Zoya - She portrays the violent behavior coupled
 * How a film description could be in the past tense? And, how an actor play a role in a film which was released ? I think it is alright. Prashant  talk  06:39, 8 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Mrigank Dhaniwala of Koimoi

- Add a short descriptor "reviewer" etc! - When? Add As of
 * Chopra is filming Maneesh Sharma's next film


 * Are you following British English or American English?
 * I have used British English. Prashant  talk  18:53, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks! --Tito Dutta (contact) 19:13, 7 April 2013 (UTC)

Comments part 02
I have read the last part too. These are some questions and comments! - What does "media image" mean? and IMO, it should be "off screen works". An alternative title might be "Other activities"!
 * Off-screen work and media image (header)
 * Changed to Off-screen work and artistry as one part talks about her Off-screen work and another is the artistry (her performance and analysis by experts and media). Prashant  talk  06:41, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

- What is Greenathon?
 * She also appeared on NDTV's Greenathon
 * Added the detail and explained it.

- When? As of needed!
 * Chopra endorses a number of brands, including Kurkure, Nivea, Maaza and Spinz

- It is a short article and has too many quotes.
 * Too many quotes
 * I don't think having too many quotes harms any article. Every quote is very very important as some are her quotes and others are critics opinions on her roles. Prashant  talk  21:09, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * 10+ quotes in a short article, minor QUOTEFARM issues. Some of those can be changed into indirect speech! --Tito Dutta (contact) 21:03, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Changing it right now. Prashant   talk  21:09, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Take your time! --Tito Dutta (contact) 21:14, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Still too many quotes. 2 quotes of Taran Adarsh in on section and the first quotes is immediately followed by another reviewer's quote! One quotes of Chopra in Parineeti_Chopra can be changes to indirect speech! --Tito Dutta (contact) 22:35, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Still too many quotes. 2 quotes of Taran Adarsh in on section and the first quotes is immediately followed by another reviewer's quote! One quotes of Chopra in Parineeti_Chopra can be changes to indirect speech! --Tito Dutta (contact) 22:35, 7 April 2013 (UTC)

- There is only 1 h3 subsection! Do you need it? Or, you can just put it under "Acting career"!
 * "Debut and breakthrough (2011–present)"
 * Because I can't have a "Recent work" subsection as her next film is few months away. So, I guess it is not necessary. Prashant  talk  19:41, 7 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Images checked: relevance and license: alright! --Tito Dutta (contact) 21:03, 7 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Filmography's Notes' column's awards list are duplicated in awards section! --Tito Dutta (contact) 22:35, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * That Filmography Column only contains two awards (Filmfare and National), which are used in every Indian actor's article and I can't have a separate award list as then, I'll be forced to merge it. Also, if you have an awards section, it is natural that all awards will be there. Prashant  talk  02:38, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

Comments part 03 Citations

 * Chopra was born on 22 October 1988 in Ambala, Haryana into a Punjabi family supported by this and this sources. The first source supports the date and the second source supports the year! I can not understand which source mentions that she was born into a Punjabi family!
 * Checked! India TV source
 * Checked! India TV source


 * Her father, Pawan Chopra, is a businessman and supplier to the Indian Army at Ambala Cantonment supported by this Times of India source! But, I can't find the name of his father in the source, thus partially fails verification!


 * Chopra's mother is Reena Chopra and she has two brothers: Shivang and Saraj supported by this and this source! Which source mentions "directly" that Reena Chopra is the mother of Parineeti Chopra? All I can find is Mrs Reena Chopra, wife of Mr Pawan Chopra!
 * Alright!
 * Alright!


 * Chopra received her early education at the Convent of Jesus and Mary in Ambala Cantonment supported by this source. I can not find anything about "Convent of Jesus and Mary"!
 * Alright!
 * Alright!


 * In 2009 she returned to India in the wake of the economic recession- two immediate next sources are this and this. Which source mentions she came back to India in 2009?
 * ✅ : NDTV source.

Prashant  talk  02:58, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay!


 * Added a CN template!
 * Tagged 2 dead links!
 * Why CN?, I mean "she supports a number of causes" - She supports NDTV Greenathon, Mijwan NGO. So, why you need additional citation to prove it? Then, I'll have to provide a source that she acts in Hindi films as well. No?
 * Those two India Today sources are not dead, they are very much working. This means that you didn't checked the sources, but only analyses by checklinks tool. Prashant  talk  11:19, 9 April 2013 (UTC)


 * I don't know, why Checklinks show all the India Today links as dead. But, they aren't. So, I have added the them after archieving them. Now, Checklinks will not show as dead. Prashant  talk  11:53, 9 April 2013 (UTC)

Comments part 04
Though length is not directly a criteria of GA, still, I am very much worried about it here. The article looks like a start class article, not a good article! Since, subject has acted in only few films, a large potion of the article is forced (i.e. it looks information has been added just to expand the article)! I'll think on it or may ask second opinion! --Tito Dutta (contact) 13:48, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
 * If it is like that, How articles of some actors passed their GA, despite being one film old. She has done two films. Also, this is not a suitable excuse.
 * Talk politely please! --Tito Dutta (contact) 14:13, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Yes, I'm polite. Prashant  talk  14:15, 9 April 2013 (UTC)


 * The actress appeared on Verve's list of most powerful women in 2011 - what is Verve? most powerful women in 2011 of India, world?
 * tweaked. Prashant  talk  14:02, 9 April 2013 (UTC)


 * I wish to do some copyedits, which I have started! I am facing trouble to find the source which supports  is regarded as one of the most promising actresses in Hindi cinema. In addition, if the "Other works" section can be split into "Media coverage" or "In the media" like this Priyanka_Chopra, it'll look excellent! --Tito Dutta (contact) 20:21, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay changed to In the media, but I can't include details like of Priyanka Chopra. Since, Parineeti Chopra is a new actress and Priyanka Chopra is working since 2000. Also, why you need extra source to prove that she is one of the most promising actresses of Hindi cinema? Is the second Paragraph of "In the media" doesn't proves that. The sources used in that section says proves all. Prashant  talk  00:19, 10 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I'll see what I can do for the first part. And about the second part, that indirectly shows, but, a citation mentioning it directly will be excellent! --Tito Dutta (contact) 00:21, 10 April 2013 (UTC)

Also, it is mentioned in the body. The Indian Express labelled her the "most brightest and talented" newcomer of this generation. It is enough to prove that, even other sources says the same. Prashant  talk  00:25, 10 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Added a new source showing the list of "one of the most promising actresses of Hindi films". Prashant  talk  00:39, 10 April 2013 (UTC)

Table
This is a short article but a good one, hopefully more content will be added soon! --Tito Dutta (contact) 18:06, 11 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Final comments