Talk:Persecution of Zoroastrians/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pyrotec (talk) 20:48, 3 September 2010 (UTC)
 * I will review. Pyrotec (talk) 20:48, 3 September 2010 (UTC)

Initial comments
I've now given the article a quick read through: it appears to be comprehensive and well-referenced, so its obviously not a "Quick fail".

I will now begin my detailed review. I'm leaving the WP:Lead until last and will work my way through the sections, highlighting any "problems. If I don't make any detailed comments on any particular section or subsection that generally means that the section/subsection is OK. Pyrotec (talk) 15:42, 6 September 2010 (UTC)

Any comments, discussion, objections, etc, can be added below:


 * Persecutions in Iran -
 * ✅ Pyrotec (talk) 15:12, 26 September 2010 (UTC) - Since the article is named "Persecution of Zoroastrians", the word "Persecution" should not be used in the section title (see WP:MOS).
 * ✅ Pyrotec (talk) 15:12, 26 September 2010 (UTC) - The section title states Persecutions in Iran, but much of the section appears to be about Persia. Is it Persia, Iran, or Persian and Iran? I will need to come back to this again. This is now getting confused, I was assuming that Iran (as in Islamist Republic) was a 19th century creation - Iran states that Persia and Iran are used interchangeably. However, later on it says "...province of Khvârvarân today known as Iraq", so Persia appears to have been larger than present-day Iran.


 * (Three minor comments)
 * ✅   The first paragraph starts: "Until the Arab invasion, Persia (modern-day Iran) was ...... dominated by a Zoroastrian majority", and there is a mention of the Sassanian empire and 224 CE, but otherwise there is no "sense" of date. I suggest that the sections needs "anchoring" in time such as: "Until the Arab invasion [in the mid 7th century], Persia ...."
 * ✅ The first and third paragraphs discusses "Arab invasion" whilst the second has the link Muslim conquest of Persia. The reader, I guess, is intended to assume that Arabs and Muslims are identical (perhaps they are - one appears to be religious belief and the other nationhood).
 * The 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence states "....Sassanian empire that passed a decree in 224 CE". This is unfinished, presummably the decree made Zoroastrianism the state religion?
 * ✅ Yazdezard is mentioned in the 1st paragraph as asking a question of an Arab solder, but who is Yazdezard? Perhaps this is a typo as Yazdegerd III appears in the next section.


 * Different translierations give different results. Nonetheless, I have changed it to Yazdegerd for standarization.


 * 642 CE to 10th Century -
 * ✅ Pyrotec (talk) 15:43, 26 September 2010 (UTC) - In this section both AD (used once) and CE in use: they need to be standardised.

...to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 16:28, 6 September 2010 (UTC)


 * The Caliphs (642-661 CE) -
 * This looks OK.


 * The Umayyads (661-750 CE) -
 * ✅  Is "Zardusht" a typo? Its not defined or wikilinked. Wikipedia suggests "Zerdusht", which is a redirect to Zoroaster.

.... to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 18:30, 6 September 2010 (UTC)


 * The Abbasids (752 - 804 CE) & The Saffarids (869-903 CE) -
 * These look OK.

...to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 19:15, 8 September 2010 (UTC)
 * 10th to 20th Century -
 * This looks OK.


 * Bibliography -
 * This needs cleaning up. The individual entries appear to be in random sequence. They aught to be listed in alphabetic sequence by first author's surname.


 * Article remains On hold. Pyrotec (talk) 16:19, 26 September 2010 (UTC)

Overall summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

I'm awarding this article GA-status. Pyrotec (talk) 21:17, 11 October 2010 (UTC)