Talk:Plebeia remota

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Peer Review
This article has a lot of great information on this bee! I particularly appreciated the section detailing reproductive diapause, a concept I had not yet been exposed to. I would suggest that the best way to give readers more important information about the bee would be to expand on the colony cycle section. For my part, I went through and edited your article for punctuation, grammar, spelling, and the overall flow. I also added a few links to integrate your page more fully into Wikipedia. I also italicized the title page since it is the latin name of a species. You've made fantastic progress on this bee! I hope my change were helpful! Kulshrestha51 (talk) 02:38, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 2
Good job on the article! I added more hyperlinks to other pages that might be helpful as well as made some grammatical edits and changed the wording of sentences to make them easier to read. I know it must be difficult to find a picture of the bee, but that could be helpful. The division of labor that has been witnessed in P. remota is very interesting, however, it's slightly difficult to read, so maybe consider putting the 7 types in bullet point format. I didn't want to make that huge edit, so I thought I would just mention it. I found the section on mating behavior very interesting as well because the queens are monandrous. Great job! comment added by Shelly May (talk • contribs) 17:45, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 3
This is a great and detailed article. I think that it could use a little bit more introductory information about the Plebia remota, even if it just details the studies just a little bit to somewhat distinguish it from other bees. I changed the last sentences in the "Workers" section (7.1) just to help the sentence flow a little better. If you have any more information about how the diet changes depending on the season (even if it is just a senetence), I think that would be beneficial. I also changed the last sentence in the "Distribution and habitat" section. Overall very well researched. IF you can find a picture, that'd be cool, but you description of its appearance is pretty good. Sihokazeh (talk • contribs) 1:45, 6 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 4
A lot of work went into this article, but here are some things that you could improve on: This article is missing a picture of the bee as well as a distribution map.

For the taxonomy section, can you add more information beyond the general information, which can be easily looked up? For example, where does this species' name come from? Who discovered it? Is it often confused with another bee?

For the Description section I disagree with Sihokazeh in that the description of the bee is actually very poor. You describe characteristics of bees in the genus Plebeia and the tribe Meliponini. You would not be able to distinguish this bee from others also in the genus Plebeia with the provided information. Also, how can you distinguish between the workers, queens and males?

For the Colony cycle section I agree with Kulshrestha51 that it is very sparse. I think that your section on Changes on Reproductive Diapause would be better if you had a section on Reproductive Diapause under Colony Cycle and a subheading describing the changes. You also don't mention that foraging changes with the seasons. You can easily find open source articles describing these changes. Finally, Plebeia remota is a seasonal bee, but this isn't discussed anywhere aside from the change from the reproductive phase to diapause.

In the Kin selection section, you mistakenly state that workers will either move away or lay a trophic egg when approached by the queen. However, they will also offer food, which I included.

The Miniature Queens section was very repetitive so I edited and deleted parts of it.

For the Males section, the first paragraph is simply paraphrasing a study, and not highlighting the pertinent information. This section should flow much more smoothly and the two paragraphs should have a better transition.

Overall, I made grammar edits, spelling, and fixed awkward wording. You weren't very careful when adding internal links so I fixed many of them. For example, in the Diet section you made a link to Eucalyplus spp., but the correct way was to link to Eucalyptus, spp. stands for species pluralis. Xerylium (talk) 22:53, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 5
Hey. Good job on the article! I thought this was one of the most well done articles from the ones I've read in class. You mostly presented a pretty neutral perspective on the subject and it was interesting to read. I just made some minor edits on the article such as adding and removing some of the hyperlinks. I found that some of the hyperlinks were defective so I thought I might as well remove them. Also, I think it might be a good idea to find a picture of the bee because that would really improve the attractiveness of the article. Matthewkim93 (talk) 03:32, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments about your article
Hi! After reading your article, I have some suggestions and corrections that I made myself.

Firstly, I think you should go more in-depth for a lot of your sections. You have partitioned a lot of the sections off, but that really makes a couple sections seem weak. For example, the "colony cycle" section is lacks substance; you need to try to find more information on that specifically, so that you can increase the span of knowledge that the reader can gain from your article. Secondly, I moved your picture down a little more of the nest; I thought that it was distracting when it was next to the description section, since I immediately assumed it was a picture of the bee. I hope that you find that a good minor edit. Other than the sparsity of certain sections, I only encountered a couple grammar errors. However, I also think you should take a look at Xerylium's comment and edits, because that editor seemed to make a lot of good points that I would agree with. Thanks for you contribution; I enjoyed it!AddyShak (talk) 19:49, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Helpful Edits and Suggestions
This article is very well-written and the content under each section is interesting to read. I focused on adding hyperlinks into this Wikipedia article to clarify uncommon terminology or locations and made grammatical edits. I created a hyperlink to “Apidae” in the first paragraph since this is the first time it is mentioned; I removed the hyperlink from the “Taxonomy and phylogeny” section. I also added a hyperlink to “Cunha” under “Distribution and habitat.” I also defined what “cerumen” was since it isn’t common terminology; while it is the medical term for “earwax”, which does have its own Wikipedia page, no discussion of how bees use wax was provided on this Wikipeida page. I also removed “What is even more interesting is that during this study” in the second paragraph under “Distribution and habitat” to make the language more neutral (this is one of the requirements of Wikipedia articles). Finally, I shortened “The fourth task workers do is called dehydration” under “Division of labor” to “The fourth task is called dehydration”; the beginning of the paragraph already introduces the fact that the four tasks are preformed by the workers and depend on the age of the workers; so, including “workers” in each sentence on the tasks is redundant. To improve the article, I would suggest adding more information, if possible, on other species this bee interacts with; this article focuses primarily on within-species interactions. Readers would obtain a better understanding of the behavior of Plebia remota with more information on species that this bee interacts with besides the plants that it forages. I'm excited to see how this article is improved upon in the future! Cmbakwe (talk) 02:03, 6 December 2015 (UTC)