Talk:Raya and the Last Dragon/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)


 * , sure. Wingwatchers (talk) 00:12, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
All ✅
 * The poster's non-free use rationale looks good.
 * The alt text for the poster feels generic. Expand it.


 * Why do some billing credits have refs. and others don't?
 * The same source is used for two credits in "story by". Why?
 * Remove the Indonesia release date per WP:FILMRELEASE.


 * Is the citation to The Numbers needed if it's wrong?
 * "impact towards" "impact on"


 * "As of June 29, 2021" - why such a specific date?
 * Add a serial comma after "story" (American English).

Plot and cast

 * At 587 words, the plot section passes WP:FILMPLOT.
 * Add a serial comma after Tong.


 * That's it here. #Cast also looks good.

Production
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 * "Moana, Frozen, Zootopia" "Frozen (2013), Moana (2016), and Zootopia (2016)"


 * Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
 * #Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
 * "the film is untitled at the time" "the film was untitled at the time"


 * This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
 * "Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
 * "Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" "Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"


 * Put Blindspotting in italics and add "(2018)" in front of it.


 * "based off" - should this be written as "based on"?


 * "quippiness" - not a word.
 * Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.
 * Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?
 * We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering. This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.
 * (hopefully)
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 * "plot line" "plotline"


 * "for why" - kinda wordy


 * Serial comma after "hair style".


 * "hair style" "hairstyle"


 * "equipments" "equipment"


 * Make "Music" a subsection per WP:FILMMUSIC.

Release

 * This source doesn't mention "November 25, 2020".
 * "and is [...] and as of" - repetitive.


 * Home media should be expanded to list its special features.

Reception

 * Several topics about the film's performance at the box office are unsourced; I marked them with the "citation needed" tag.
 * "thanks in-part", "closely behind", "huge jump" - doesn't sound encyclopedic.
 * Add a WP:DATECOMMA after June 4, 2021.

All ✅
 * The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
 * Put IndieWire in italics and wikilink SFGate.

Future
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 * Should be expanded to more than one sentence.

Progress
could you put done or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks. Pamzeis (talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ Wingwatchers (talk) 02:23, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

, All done. Wingwatchers (talk) 18:16, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Some references still need to be adjusted for WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
 * , thank you Pamzeis for fixing them. Wingwatchers (talk) 02:54, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I have added three reviews in the "Critical response" section, hopefully, it will pass GA. Wingwatchers (talk) 04:32, 10 July 2021 (UTC)