Talk:Ron and Tammy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Xtzou ( Talk ) 16:12, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I have a few questions/comments. Xtzou ( Talk ) 16:12, 13 April 2010 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * "In the episode, the library department tries to take the pit from Leslie. Ron's ex-wife" - what is the "pit"? It is not mentioned in the plot section.
 * Reworded to be more clear. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * "Donna (Retta) insists to Leslie that the arrangement is a mistake because the two are crazy together." - "crazy together" - Is that a colloquialism?
 * Reworded. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * 'Offerman responded, "Yeah, that would be amazing." ' Not sure what this means in the context of the wikipedia article. It makes a little more sense in the news article because more context is given there than is lacking here.
 * I just mean to convey that Offerman was very responsive to the idea. I've dropped the quote and paraphrased instead. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * "Offerman accidentally pulled a diner table out of the wall while Mullally laid on top of it." Do you mean "while Mullally was lying on top of it"? (Although I can't feature how she would be lying on top of a wall)
 * I tried to make this more clear as well. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Perhaps it should be emphasized somewhere that the actors playing Ron and Tammy are real world husband and wife. I think it is only mentioned in the lead, and I had to spend some time figuring out who was married to whom amidst all the names, real and fictional.
 * The first paragraph of the production section says, "Mullally is the real-life wife of Nick Offerman, who plays Ron Swanson in Parks and Recreation." Do you think I should reword the sentence to place more emphasis on it? Some specific wording suggestions would be helpful... —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * "in exchange for a 40 percent commission and Brandon" - I don't get the "and Brandon" part.
 * That's a mistake, I'm not sure where it came from. Dropped it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * "2.2 rating/6 share" - what does the rating mean, a 6 percent share?
 * Added wording to explain this. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * "Steve Heisler from The A.V. Club praised the episode and the performance of Swanson" - I had to do a search to find out who Swanson was. Most of the time you call him "Ron". I think you need to be consistent as there are already so many names and characters. And Swanson is the character's name, right? So he critic is praising the performance of a character? Am I misunderstanding?
 * That should refer to Offerman, not Swanson. Fixed. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Another nicely written piece. Xtzou ( Talk ) 19:03, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Congradulations! Xtzou ( Talk ) 19:03, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
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