Talk:Sarawak/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:30, 19 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! I am interested to review this. Will start adding my comments from today itself. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 11:30, 19 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking this review! :-) Cerevisae (talk) 12:11, 19 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * is one of the two Malaysian states on the island of Borneo Could add the other state in this line.✅
 * of the Malaysian federation Any link for "Malaysian federation"? What is it? Should "f" be in capital? Could add when this was founded.✅ I have linked the Federation. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  It is also known as Bumi Kenyalang ("Land of the Hornbills"). These "a.k.a." names are typically added (in bold) just after the main name and its pronounciation (here, Sarawak). ✅
 * economic centre of state and seat of Sarawak  I think this should read: economic centre of the state and seat of the Sarawak  unless I got it wrong.✅
 * The capital city is ... Sibu, and Bintulu Better write Kuching, the capital city, is also the economic centre of state and seat of Sarawak state government. Other cities and towns in Sarawak include Miri, Sibu, and Bintulu.✅
 *  As of the last census (2015) census in Malaysia or where? Don't link census.✅
 * Sarawak has an equatorial climate with tropical rainforests Can link "equatorial climate" and "rainforest"✅
 * Can "cave system" be linked?✅ Linked "Cave" only. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  Rajang River is the longest river in Malaysia. Bakun Dam, one of the largest dams in Southeast Asia is located at one of the tributaries of the Rajang River.  Combine these two sentences. ✅
 * Earliest human settlements in Sarawak was 40,000 years ago at Niah Caves. Could this be combined with the line on cave systems in the previous para? ❌ Niah Caves are different from Mulu caves. Niah Caves is best known for its prehistory but not its cave formations while Mulu caves is best known of its unique cave formations. However, there is no evidence of human inhabitants in Mulu caves. These two caves are situated inside different national parks. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  The state had a trading relationship with China during 8th to 13th century Link China. AD/BCE? ✅
 * Earliest human settlements in Sarawak was 40,000 years ago at Niah Caves Better say "date back to 40,000 years ago at the Niah Caves" ✅
 * for 100 years from 19th to 20th century Is "for 100 years" not redundant? ✅ Removed "100 years". Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)
 * and later formed the federation of Malaysia  Not clear who formed the federation: Sarawak or Britain? ✅
 * formed the federation of Malaysia This looks like a repetition from the first para. Could the two mentions be merged? And what again was this federation about? ✅ Moved the Federation of Malaysia sentence from first para and replace this sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 07:00, 20 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The state is multi-ethnic, multi-cultural, and multi-lingual To remove the repetition of "multi", could write The state exhibits notable diversity in ethnicity, culture and language. ✅
 * also known as Yang di-Pertua Negeri while the head  "Negeri, while" ✅
 * is Chief Minister "the" ✅
 * English and Malay are official languages of the state  Are these the only two official languages or the two major ones? Should be clearly written. ✅
 * while there is no official religion --> ; there is no official religion (use semicolon instead) ✅
 * celebrate Gawai Dayak festival "the" ✅
 * Duplinks (the word(s) linked twice, these are typically removed; there is no problem in linking a word in the lead as well as the main text) : Sabah ✅

Thank you. I have made a few more changes here, please check them. Can the first two paras of the lead be merged? The first looks too short and too many paras may not look good. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 07:18, 20 March 2016 (UTC)

Etymology

 * What is the source for the pronunciation of "Sarawak"? Could use this source: []✅
 * The trouble now is whether we include the English or the Malay pronunciation. The Malay one has no source yet. And the same pronunciation should be mentioned both in the lead and Etymology. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 07:51, 20 March 2016 (UTC) ✅ I decided to use the English pronounciation. Cerevisae (talk) 13:04, 21 March 2016 (UTC)


 * of the word Sarawak  Sarawak in double quotes ✅
 * from Sarawak Malay word of serawak which means antimony Better say from the Sarawak Malay word serawak, which means antimony ✅
 * Pangeran Muda Hashim, John Brooke You need to introduce these people. Links? ✅
 * However, such an explanation has several flaws because the territory had already been named Sarawak ✅
 *  before the arrival of James Brooke Simply say "Brooke" ✅
 * before the Malaysian federation the "formation" of ✅

Prehistory

 * (located 110 km southwest of Miri) Could use a convert template ✅
 * Seems we have a contradiction here. According to the lead the first human settlement here was in the Niah Caves 40,000 years ago. This section says it was 50,000 years ago. Moreover The earliest evidence of human population in the area dates back to 40,000 BC in Niah Cave at Paleolithic period looks like a repetition ✅. Converted 50,000 years to 40,000 years. Removed the second sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  a Homo sapiens skull  Can we simply say "human" skull? ✅ "modern human skull" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * and plant gathering What exactly does this mean? ✅ "gathering of edible plants" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * and more open than it is now What does this mean? ✅ "exposed" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Unfossilised What does this mean? ✅ "without becoming a fossil" used. Cerevisae (talk) 09:58, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I have done some copyediting here and here, please check that the meanings of the lines are not altered. Please check the errors made and do not repeat them in future.

Bruneian empire

 * The eastern seaboard of Borneo was charted Could the meaning be clearer? ✅ Removed this sentence. It mentions Borneo in general. The Portugese did not settle in "this area" also refers to Borneo in general. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The Bruneian empire only had authority along the coastal regions Does this mean only the Empire had this right or was this the only right the Empire had? ✅ Moved "only" to after the word "authority". Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Malay chiefs Who were they? Links? ✅. "Malay" linked. changed "chiefs" to "leaders". Nobody know the names of these Malay chiefs. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Who is Pangeran Indera Mahkota? ✅ He is a representative of Sultan of Brunei. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Don't link James Brooke here if already linked in the Etymology section as I suggested. You can add a word about who he was ✅
 * Who is Pangeran Muda Hashim? ✅ (uncle of Sultan of Brunei) Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link Sinian ✅ Deleted this place. Very difficult to find sources about it. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Say either Pangeran or Pengeran. ✅ Used Pangeran. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Done some copyediting here. Check the edit to see if the meaning is unaltered. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 14:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Brooke dynasty

 * Duplinks: James Brooke, Brunei, Kuching, Miri, Bintulu, Kuching ✅. So I should only link for two instances in the whole article? (one link for lead and another link in the article body) Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Now the lines  In 1846, Brooke effectively became the Rajah of Sarawak and founded the White Rajah Dynasty of Sarawak after the death of Pengeran Muda Hashim. appear repetitions to me. ✅. Deleted "In 1846, Brooke effectively became the Rajah of Sarawak". Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Brooke ruled the territory, later expanded, across the western regions of Sarawak around Kuching until his death in 1868 Could not understand this. ✅ "Brooke ruled the area and expanded the territory northwards until his death in 1868." Is this sentence understandable? Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  with his brother Bertram Brooke Whose brother? ✅ Vyner Brooke's brother. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  Bintulu region until Tanjung Kidurong What does this mean? ✅ Removed Tanjung Kidurong. This area is also under the Bintulu region. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * penjajah in Malay Need this be mentioned? ✅ Removed this phrase. Since the source is in Malay, I have added this phrase for clarity. But it makes the article text a bit weird. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Sarawak was accorded a status of similar to Indian princely states in the British Empire What exactly was this status? ✅ Removed this sentence. I think it is very clear that Sarawak was recognised as an independent state in the previous paragraph. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * contingent militia What does this mean? ✅ Reduced the phrase to "milita" only. Cerevisae (talk)
 * Can Hakka Chinese be linked? ✅ Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * assaulted Brooke's residence and it was burnt down You mean "damaged" the residence? How? Who burnt it? ✅ changed to "under the leadership of Liu Shan Bang, destroyed the Brooke's residence." Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * He was able to defeat them later When and how? ✅ Added more details about Brooke's army and his attack on Chinese rebels. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * British protectorates Link? ✅ Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  In 1891, Charles Brooke, the second White Rajah of Sarawak No need to introduce him again. To avoid confusion with the third ruler you can say Charles Anthoni Brooke. ✅ Used Charles Anthoni Brooke. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 * More copyediting. Please check this. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

Japanese occupation and Allied liberation

 * Duplinks: Kuching, Mukah, Bintulu, North Borneo, Southeast Asia ✅
 * What is Singkawang "II"? ✅ Removed "II" from Singkawang. Actually Singkawang II is a military base in Singkawang. But I don't know what is Singkawang I. Cerevisae (talk) 17:49, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  important positions in the government such as? ❌ Cannot find any sources on the examples important positions in the Japanese government. Changed the wordings to "prioritising Japanese for government positions."Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Charles Vyner Brooke already left for Sydney The meaning is not clear. Had he already left before the attack or did he escape immediately? ✅ He left for Sydney before the attack began. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link Allied in Allied forces later formed ✅ Linked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * What is SEMUT? ✅ Linked Semut operation. It is a code name. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * surrender of Japanese to the Australian forces Were the Australian forces part of the Allies? Else how do they come into the picture? Mention it. ✅ Added "Allied forces (headed by Australia)" in the previous sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * More copyediting. Please check these edits. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:05, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

British crown colony

 * Little copyedit, here. ✅ Checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:40, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplink: Bertram Brooke ✅

Self-government and the Federation of Malaysia

 * Duplinks: Sabah, Brunei, Limbang ✅
 * which would be called Malaysia Is this to say that the federation was known as Malaysia in the future, or was it Rahman's plan to name it so? ✅ changed to "which he called Malaysia". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  between Malaya and Singapore with the Borneo states What does this mean? ✅ changed to "between Malaya and the Borneo states." Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * of the Sarawak and Sabah  is "the" needed? ✅ changed to "to gauge the support of Sarawak and Sabah" Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * local Sarawakians Is this the correct term to refer to them? Just a confirmation. ✅ Removed "local" since "Sarawakians" is already local. Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The group was later succeeded by What does this mean? changed "succeeded" to "succeded". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * communist guerrillas Link? ✅ Linked "Communism" and "Guerilla warfare". Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Copyedit: here and here. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:04, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

Territorial disputes

 * While land border demarcation and maritime disputes between Sarawak and Kalimantan are currently yet to be settled with Indonesia Looks like an error, or is this incomplete? ✅ changed to this sentence:"Meanwhile, there are several Sarawak-Kalimantan border issues yet to be settled with Indonesia.". Cerevisae (talk) 09:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Little copyedit here. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 09:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Government and politics

 *  Yang di-Pertuan Agong can this be translated? ✅ He is simply known as the king. Cerevisae (talk)
 * Could not understand these parts:
 * Sarawak has been a political stronghold of the ruling Alliance Party and, later, the Barisan Nasional (BN) coalition since its independence in 1963. ✅ Changed to: "Sarawak has been the political stronghold of the ruling Alliance Party and, later, the Barisan Nasional (BN) coalition (its successor) since the formation of Malaysia in 1963." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * landslide victories of three tier system of local council elections. ✅ changed to "landslide victory of local council elections". Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * (of the PESAKA) not introduced before ✅ Changed the previous sentence to "Other major political parties such as Parti Pesaka Sarawak (PESAKA) appeared by 1962." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * at first by Abdul Rahman Ya'kub and followed by his nephew Abdul Taib Mahmud ✅ changed to "...beginning of ethnic Melanau domination in Sarawak politics by Abdul Rahman Ya'kub and Abdul Taib Mahmud." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * the first Peninsular-based party ✅ changed to "was the first West Malaysia-based party to open its branches in Sarawak." Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Duplinks: Sarawak State Legislative Assembly, Sarawak United Peoples' Party, Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, Abdul Taib Mahmud, North Kalimantan Communist Party, Sarawak National Party.
 * Copyedit: here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:30, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Subdivisions

 * Source for the table? ✅ citation added. Cerevisae (talk) 22:02, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Security

 * Duplink: Constitution of Malaysia ✅
 * Ninth Schedule of the Constitution of Malaysia stated that  Why is this in past tense? ✅ changed to present tense. Cerevisae (talk) 22:19, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * that is suitable with the security in Sarawak What does this mean? ✅ Removed the whole sentence. Even the website does not clearly specify the objectives and functions of this unit and also the rationale of creating this unit in Sarawak. Cerevisae (talk) 22:19, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Geography

 * Duplinks: Kalimantan, Southeast Asia, Kuching, Bintulu, Miri, South China Sea, Kenyah, Sarawak River, Rajang River, Baram River ✅
 * The coordinates should be written as in this line (from Kerala): Lying between northern latitudes 8°18' and 12°48' and eastern longitudes 74°52' and 77°22' ✅
 * Mount Batu Lawi, Mount Mulu and Mount Murud as the highest point in Sarawak Can be clearer, could not understand very well ✅ changed to "becoming the higher near the source of the Baram River with the steep Mount Batu Lawi, and Mount Mulu. Mount Murud is the highest point in Sarawak." Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * UNESCO World Heritage Site Link ✅
 * Sarawak is a tropical country with an equatorial climate Links? ✅
 * between 23 °C in the morning and 32 °C in the afternoon, between 330 cm and 460 cm Convert templates? ✅
 * while podzol accounts for 12% of the Sarawak land area. Alluvium is found in the coastal and riverine regions while 12% of Sarawak land area are covered with peat swamps Just need to ensure that peat and podzol are not the same. I hope you have not repeated the fact? ✅podzol and peat are not the same. Podzol soil is for eucalypt, coniferous, and boreal forests in temperate areas while peat is for peat swamp forests. However, podzol can also be found in tropical areas in lesser extent. Quote from Podzol article: "but they can also be found in other settings including both temperate rainforests and tropical areas". Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * While the youngest Igneous rock in this region is Andesite lava at Sematan. Could not understand this. ✅ changed "Andesite lava" to "Andesite rock"
 *  Types of stones that can be found here What exactly is "here"? ✅ changed to "central and northern Sarawak". Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I have done more copyediting: here and here. ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 03:12, 25 March 2016 (UTC)

Biodiversity

 * Duplinks:Limbang, Gunung Mulu National Park, Lambir Hills National Park, proboscis monkeys. ✅
 * mangrove and nipah forests Links? ✅
 * hill Dipterocarpaceae forests What does "hill" mean here? ✅ Removed "hill". Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Could not understand It also has 19% of the mammals, 6% of the birds, 20% of the snakes and 32% of the lizards as endemic species ✅ changed to "The state also accounts for 19% of the mammals, 6% of the birds, 20% of the snakes and 32% of the lizards as endemic species." Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Sarawak chief minister Abdul Taib Mahmud "The then chief minister" if he is not in the post anymore. ✅ Used "the then" Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Could not understand and to maintain 60% forest cover ✅ changed to "The Sarawak government also planned to preserve 60% forest cover in the coming years." Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  which links to corruption by chief minister Abdul Taib Mahmud and his family. This is a risky statement, could indicate bias. ✅ Removed the sentence. Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Currently, the proposed Baram Dam project Don't use "currently", give the years ✅
 * Copyedit here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 15:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)

Economy

 * Duplinks: Kuala Lumpur, Labuan, Bintulu, Miri, Luconia Shoals ✅
 * Manufacturing industry of Sarawak mainly consisting of food and beverages, wood-based and rattan products, basic metal products, and petrochemical products Errors here. Is anything missing? Same in the immediately next sentence ✅ changed to "The main contributors for manufacturing industry are: food and beverages, wood-based and rattan products, basic metal products, and petrochemical products." and "Meanwhile, services industry are contributed by cargo transportation services, air transport, and tourism." Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link petrochemical ✅
 * Sarawak contributed 10.1% of the national GDP GDP of Malaysia? ✅ Used "GDP of Malaysia". ✅
 * RM 527 million in 1963 to RM 58 billion in 2013 Can we use money conversion templates here? And in the rest of the section? ✅ Wikipedia templates doesn't recognise Malaysian Ringgit. I used manual conversion instead. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  Sarawak state government is able to maintain fiscal surpluses over seven years until 2013, supported by oil and gas industry which accounted for 34.8% of the state's revenue Why is this in present tense? Same for Total exports as a percentage of GDP is more than 100% in 2013  ✅ Used past tense. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * sawlogs, and sawn timber  Link sawn timber. Sawlog is to be linked here, but it is linked a little later in the section ✅
 * What is oil royalty? ✅ added "(percentage of oil production paid by the mining company to the lease owner]])" Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link UN ✅
 * The last UN statistics Year? ✅
 * WTK, and KTS Full names? ✅
 *  last 4 years until 2013  Don't say "last ... years", always give the years themselves ✅ changed to "from 2009 until 2013". Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link poverty rate ✅ Linked poverty.Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * CE here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 03:14, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Energy

 * Duplinks: Bakun Dam, Murum Dam, Liquefied Natural Gas, Sarawak Corridor of Renewable Energy, Bintulu, Mukah ✅
 * There are currently three operational dams in Sarawak as of 2015 Omit currently ✅
 * Sarawak also derived its electrical energy Why in past tense? ✅ changed to present tense. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "research and development" Link not needed. ✅
 * Link biomass, tidal, hydroelectric ✅
 * coal fired power plants You mean coal-based ? ✅ changed to "coal-based" Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  aluminium, glass, steel, oil, fisheries, livestock, timber, and tourism Are the industries listed in terms of priority? They are all high priority areas but themselves are not arranged in terms of priority. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The last lines list future plans. When were they planned? ✅ Plans were started since 2008. Cerevisae (talk) 10:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Tourism

 * Duplink: Kuching ✅
 *  20,000 music fans  I think "people" would be more proper. Not all need to be fans! ✅ changed to "people" Cerevisae (talk) 10:52, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * CE here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 10:52, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Infrastructure

 * In 2009, 94% of urban areas and 67% of rural areas has electrical supply. In 2014, 91% of the rural areas has electrical supply. Combine the two lines. And "has" should be "have". ✅
 * What is fixed line penetration rate and mobile phone penetration rate? ✅ changed to "In terms of telecommunication, the coverage of fixed phone line in Sarawak was 25.7%, and the mobile phone usage was 93.3% in 2013." Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  Computers usage was only 45.9% in the same year. Internet usage was 58.5% in urban areas and 29.9% in rural areas What are the percentages indicating? The percentage of people using this? State clearly. ✅ changed to "Percentage of people using the internet was 58.5% in urban areas and 29.9% in rural areas." Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Sacofa Sdn Bhd What is Sdn Bhd? ✅ added "(Sacofa Private Limited)" Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Don't link Information technology ✅
 * CE here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 06:46, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Transport

 * Duplinks: Sematan, Bintulu, Kapit, Kuala Lumpur, Rajang River ✅
 * Many conversion templates needed ✅ except for freight weight tonnes (FWT). There is no wiki conversion template available for FWT. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * What is federal highway?
 * The primary route in Sarawak would be Why future tense? ✅ changed to "is the" Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Could not understand connecting from south-western tip of Sematan, Sarawak through Brunei until the north-eastern end of Tawau, Sabah ✅ Removed "south-western tip", and "north-eastern end" Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * However, the road condition is unsatisfactory Explain why. ✅ source added. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * There are three airlines serving flight routes in Sarawak: Malaysia Airlines, Air Asia, and MASwings. Source? ✅
 * CE here and here ✅ checked. Cerevisae (talk) 12:27, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Healthcare

 * 1Malaysia clinics What is that? ✅
 * A variety of traditional medicinal practices are still being used by the various communities in Sarawak Would be interesting if we can have further sourced info on this. ✅ added four sources. Cerevisae (talk) 13:45, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * There are 2,237 doctors in Sarawak... As of which year? ✅
 * CE here ✅

Demographics

 * Note: This section has been repeatedly vandalized by some IPs. Please check that the percentages and figures are still accurate. ✅
 * Duplinks: Ibans, Bidayuh, Melanau, Murut, Iban people, Peninsular Malaysia ✅
 * As of the 2015 census Of where? ✅

Iban

 * Sarawak has the highest number of Ibans in Borneo Their number? ✅
 * I think the groups should be arranged alphabetically, or is there some other order here? ❌ These are arranged in terms of hierarchy. The first one to be mentioned is of the highest hierarchy, followed by the second one in the hierarchy. Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplink: Rajang basin ✅
 * when headhunting was prevalent What is headhunting? Has this been mentioned elsewhere? ❌ It is linked in the sentence "Piracy, slavery, and headhunting were also banned." in the "Brooke dynasty" section. Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * symbol of ritual well being among its households What does it mean? ✅ changed to "ritual symbol" Cerevisae (talk) 11:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Chinese

 * The Chinese first came to Sarawak as traders and explorers in the 6th century AD/BC? ✅
 *  They organised themselves economically Meaning? ✅ Sentence removed. Cerevisae (talk) 12:37, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * before subscribed to the ideology of Sarawak nationalism after the formation of Malaysia in 1963 Meaning? ✅ changed to "before adopting the ideology of Sarawak nationalism after 1963." Cerevisae (talk) 12:37, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplinks: Bau, Sarawak, Sarawak River, Sibu, Rajang River, Miri ✅

Malay

 * (Malay kampung/village) What does it mean? Write properly ✅ Removed "kampung". Just use "village" Cerevisae (talk) 10:56, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * They choose to build settlements (Malay kampung/village) along the river banks. Today, they migrated to urban areas So is the first line about what they did in the past? The second line is grammatically wrong and I can not understand it. ✅ changed to "They chose to build settlements (Malay villages) along the river banks. Today, they migrate to urban areas and work in public and private sectors." Cerevisae (talk) 12:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * silver/brass craftings What does "/" mean? ✅ changed to "silver and brass crafts" Cerevisae (talk) 12:47, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Examples of Malay kampungs (villages) You have already defined it Don't repeat ✅
 * Duplinks: Fort Margherita, Melanau ✅

Melanau

 * Duplink: Mukah ✅
 * kampungs (villages) Why define again? ✅ Removed "kampung" Cerevisae (talk) 10:57, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * They worked as fishermen, boat-builders, and craftsmen. The Melananus originally practices paganism but today most of them are Muslims. However, some of them still practices Christianity and paganism. They do celebrate traditional animists Kaul festival. Very poorly written. Please correct it yourself, I may change the meaning accidentally. ✅ changed to "They originally practiced paganism and celebrate Kaul festival but today most of them are Muslims." Cerevisae (talk) 09:11, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Bidayuh

 * Link percussion, limestone ✅

Orang Ulu

 * The word Orang Ulu means "upriver people". What is the original language? ✅ Iban language. Cerevisae (talk) 20:59, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  in upriver of the Sarawak's interior Where is the water body whose upriver or upstream it is? ✅ Used "upstream" Cerevisae (talk) 20:59, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplinks: Kenyah, Penan, Bario, Ba'kelalan, Baram River ✅

Religion

 * Duplinks: Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, Yang di-Pertuan Agong, Iban, Bidayuh, Orang Ulu Malay, Melanau, Kedayan, animism. ✅
 * Sarawak constitution The Constitution of Sarawak ✅
 * BEM or Sidang Injil Borneo, S.I.B. One short form uses periods, the other does not ✅
 * Buddhism, Taoism, and Chinese Folk Religion Link. Why are caps used in Chinese Folk Religion? ✅ Used small letters. Cerevisae (talk) 09:38, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Other minor religions in Sarawak are Baha'i, Hinduism, Sikhism, and animism. Source? ✅ Four sources added. Cerevisae (talk) 15:45, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Languages

 * Duplinks: Stephen Kalong Ningkan, Abdul Rahman Ya'kub, state legislative assembly, Chief Minister, Adenan Satem, Sarawak Malay, Orang Ulu ✅

Culture

 * Sarawak has a multiracial, multicultural, and multilingual society Reword as I suggested in the lead ✅
 * Religions such as Christianity have affected the lives of indigenous people particularly Kelabit people and Lun Bawang people. Christianity plays an important role in their daily lives, and has changed their ethnic identities. ✅ changed tp "Christianity plays an important role in the daily lives of the Kelabit and Lun Bawang and has changed their ethnic identities." Cerevisae (talk) 22:51, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Carpenter Streets Should this be "Street"? ✅
 * Duplinks: Headhunting, Kelabit people, Lun Bawang, Mount Santubong, Fort Margherita, Kapit, Kuching, Bario, Ba'kelalan, Sibu, Chinatown, Kuching✅

Fine arts and crafts

 * Duplink: Sapeh, Universiti Malaysia Sarawak ✅
 *  Hikayat Panglima Nikosa Who wrote it? ✅

Media

 * The government and its wealthy allies virtually controls every newspapers in Sarawak through restrictive laws and personal connections. Looks like a risky sentence. I think the "wealthy allies" and "controls every paper" parts should be omitted. It is a fact that they impose laws and restrictions - so keep just them. I am not sure what to do about the subsequent examples. You may say "the Sarawak government is popularly believed to exert its influence over the media." I do not think the allies part is proper here.✅ Changed to "The Sarawak government is popularly believed to exert its influence over the media. Examples of newspapers based in Sarawak are ..." Cerevisae (talk) 10:47, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplink:Rimbunan Hijau ✅ Removed. Cerevisae (talk) 10:47, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Holidays and festivals

 * Duplinks: Sarawak Self-government Day, Gawai Dayak ✅

Sports

 * 1958 and 1962 British Empire and Commonwealth Games Link this as 1958 and 1962 British Empire and Commonwealth Games ✅
 * Olympic medal to the total of 6 medals won by Malaysia For which year? ✅ from 1992 to 2012. Cerevisae (talk) 09:28, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Paraphrasing possibility
Earwig's copyvio detector found some paraphrasing which you can see here. You need to reword the portions accordingly. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 12:12, 24 March 2016 (UTC)✅ Now reduced to 9.1% Cerevisae (talk) 04:45, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

I believe I have completed the list of issues. Take your time and work through the issues carefully. Good luck! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 13:04, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks, your help is greatly appreciated! Cerevisae (talk) 22:04, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ All issues addressed! Cerevisae (talk) 04:45, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

I have no words for your work! I am truly happy to promote this. Congrats! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 05:01, 2 April 2016 (UTC)