Talk:Sunidhi Chauhan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:05, 4 December 2017 (UTC)

I'll review this. Cheers! Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:05, 4 December 2017 (UTC)

Lead
 * "..made her career debut at the age of 13". --> thirteen.
 * Changed Shaphiu (talk) 14:09, 4 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Merge the next two sentences.
 * The last sentence of first para should start with something like, "It won her..."
 * Why not delink the songs that don't have their own article and mention the films name along with it.
 * "..and was described in the media" --> described by the media.
 * "2006 was one of the most successful years in her career.." This sentence should be more neutrally worded.
 * "The following year, she was prominently recognized.." Again. Prominently recognized?
 * The fact that she was featured in a different version of "Heartbeat" should be mentioned here.
 * You meant to say "should'nt be mentioned here"? Because it is already included in the lead. Removing the sentence for now. Correct me if wrong. Shaphiu (talk) 14:09, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
 * No. It should be mentioned. I'm saying that you need to mention that she featured in a different version of the song. Kindly restore the sentence from the lead. Yashthepunisher (talk) 14:17, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry, my bad. Done!


 * 12th --> twelfth, for consistency.
 * The sentence about her being the judge of Indian Idol and The voice, should be rephrased and merged.
 * "Being an inspiration to many upcoming singers". This sentence is quite WP:POV-ish.
 * There is one dead link and some links need archive.
 * Dead links archived Shaphiu (talk) 14:09, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Archive the green links and try to fix the blue ones by replacing them.
 * Done!

Rest of the comments coming soon. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:46, 4 December 2017 (UTC)

Early life
 * Delink India, per WP:OLINK.
 * Link Rajput.
 * Her mother's name should be mentioned.
 * Couldn't find any source indicating such. What to do now?


 * Link Dilshad Garden.
 * "She discontinued studies" --> She discontinued her studies.
 * "..her dad quit his career". quit his career or quit his job?
 * Remove the "After shifting there" bit as its redundant to mention it again. You can rephrase it with something like: "After that.."
 * Anything about how she bacame Sunidhi from Nidhi?

1995–2000: Career beginnings, Mast and Fiza Yashthepunisher (talk) 05:30, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
 * 13 --> thirteen
 * realized --> realised, its Indian english.
 * "For the next two years, she mostly did background scores." Was she composing those scores?
 * "For the song "Ruki Ruki Si", Chauhan". Replace 'Chauhan' with 'she' to avoid repetition.
 * "Ditto for the last sentence of second para.
 * "while recording of the song.." --> as recording of the song.
 * "Chauhan received another nomination for Best Female Playback Singer". Which ceremony?


 * Above mentioned changes brought to the article. Shaphiu (talk) 14:17, 5 December 2017 (UTC)

2001–05: Ajnabee, Chameli and Dhoom Yashthepunisher (talk) 06:43, 6 December 2017 (UTC)
 * "Sukanya Verma of Rediff.com described Chauhan's rendition --> described 'her' rendition.
 * Mention the year of Ehsaas: The feeling and write 'a' duet with Sonu Nigam, in the same sentence.
 * "During the year, she teamed up with Ismail Darbar for the first time and released her "most difficult" song of recording; "Ai Ajnabi" from Deewangee." You can write instead: "During the year, she teamed up with Ismail Darbar for the first time and released the song "Ai Ajnabi" from Deewangee which she described as her most difficult song.
 * Chauhan, alongside Abhijeet performed..". Abhijeet who? mention the full name and put a comma after his name.
 * "which critics felt that she is.." --> felt that she was. Past tense.
 * Link M.M Kreem, if he was not linked before.
 * Mention 'critic' before Priyanka Bhattacharya.
 * "Her second collaboration with Sandesh Shandilya was." When did the first one happen?
 * Replace 'Chauhan' with 'her' in the last sentence of third para.
 * "..which was both critically and commercially appreciated." Commercially appreciated? The last bit should be rephrased.
 * "And "Saiyan" from Garv is "no different" from A.R. Rahman-composed "Saiyyan" of Nayak (2001)." We shouldn't start sentences with an 'and'.
 * Done Shaphiu (talk) 14:21, 6 December 2017 (UTC)

2006–09: Omkara, Aaja Nachle and Rab Ne Bana Di Jodi
 * "She received further two nominations during the year; "Soniye" from.." --> She received further two nominations during the year for "Soniye" from Aksar.
 * in 10 other films. --> in ten other films.
 * Ref 56 is just one review and doesn't justify the 'critically favoured' bit.
 * Ditto for ref 57.
 * Link Komal Nahta.
 * The sentence about Fanaa is too long.
 * There are too many references for the last sentence of second para. See WP:CITEKILL.
 * Why not remove the Kajol bit from the third para only mention Madhuri Dixit, since the sentence is too long and confusing.
 * I think you can replace "JBJ" with 'title track'.
 * Link Raja Sen.
 * "However, they found.." --> However, he found.
 * Replace "the vim it requires" with the "required vim".
 * Replace 'Chauhan' with 'she' in third para's last sentence.
 * Chauhan received her eleventh Filmfare nomination.
 * I didn't get the last bit about "Desi girl". Who are we talking about?
 * Can you replace Raja Sen's review of Paa with someone else? I think its been overused in the article.
 * Couldnt find another review from a reliable source. Anything else I can do regarding this? Shaphiu (talk) 15:26, 7 December 2017 (UTC)
 * You can use these refs . Yashthepunisher (talk) 16:49, 7 December 2017 (UTC)


 * The ref for "Raat Ke Dhai Baje" doesn't support the 'critical acclaim' bit, its just one review. Yashthepunisher (talk) 06:59, 7 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Done! Shaphiu (talk) 15:26, 7 December 2017 (UTC)

2010–13: Euphoria, Guzaarish and Tees Maar Khan

Yashthepunisher (talk) 05:42, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
 * "2010 marks Chauhan's international singing debut, where she was featured in an alternate version of the song.." --> 2010 marked Chauhan's international singing debut, where she featured in an alternate version of the song.
 * Link Holi in the next sentence.
 * "The year marks her ever collaboration with Sanjay Leela Bhansali by recording the international styled carnival song "Udi" from Guzaarish." This needs to be written in a better way.
 * Replace 'Chauhan' with 'she' in the sentence about her winning Filmfare for Sheila ki jawaani.
 * I feel there are two many songs of her mentioned from the year 2010, try removing one of them atleast to maintain articles size. Teen Patti, maybe.
 * The last two sentences of second para also start with 'Chauhan'.
 * Along with 10 other artists.." --> ten
 * The year marks Chauhan's first collaboration with her husband Hitesh Sonik by recording the song "Tu" for My Friend Pinto--> The year marked her first collaboration with her husband Hitesh Sonik with the song "Tu" from My Friend Pinto.
 * "Chauhan proved her versatility by performing Sufi inflected love ballad.." It should be neutrally worded.
 * Remove the sentence about her dubbing for Rio since it doesn't have much significance. It wasn't a bilingual film.
 * Remove the 'as the fourth judge' bit from the fourth para's first sentence, as its stretching the prose.
 * Mention the films name in the following sentence.
 * In concerned with the last sentence about "Chokra Jawaan". Is it required?
 * "The year marks Chauhan's second collaboration with Ajay-Atul by recording "Gun Gun Guna" from Agneepath along with Udit Narayan." The 'second-collaboration' bit is repetitive and trivial.
 * Chauhan performed a high pitched rendition.." --> She performed a high pitched.."
 * R.Rajkumar review should have a better attribution.
 * Filmfare should be in caps.

Observing how time taking it was to step by step review each section slowly, I have copy-edited the rest of the sections. I'll quickly move on to source review. Yashthepunisher (talk) 09:57, 10 December 2017 (UTC)

Source review . That's it from it. Resolve all the above mentioned queries and it shall pass. Yashthepunisher (talk) 08:24, 12 December 2017 (UTC)
 * At ref 12, Mid-Day --> Mid Day.
 * Ditto for ref 102.
 * Ref 13, Yahoo! --> Yahoo! News.
 * Ref 17, The Times of Oman --> Times of Oman.
 * "Awards & Winners" doesn't seem to qualify WP:RS.
 * Ditto for "Radio and Music".
 * CNN-IBN --> CNN-News18.
 * Mention the authors as "|last=|first=" in every reference with the author's name.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
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