Talk:Takin' It Back/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:08, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

Taking this on proudly per your request! --K. Peake 19:08, 10 April 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Pipe bubblegum pop to Bubblegum music
 * You need to write out the production credits in prose for them to be included
 * "Artists featured on the album include" → "Featured artists include"
 * "The album's lyrical themes revolve" → "The former's lyrical themes revolve"
 * Mention some of the shows that the live performances included
 * "The album was supported by" → "It was supported by"
 * "becoming her first song" → "becoming Trainor's first song"
 * "to label it a sequel to" → "to be labeled as a sequel to"
 * "It debuted at number 16" → "The former debuted at number 16"

Background

 * "she was writing" → "she was recording" per the source
 * "as Trainor rewrote it four times in an attempt to "adapt" → "as Trainor rewrote the album four times in an attempt of "adapting" per the source
 * Remove commas around Title
 * "have the chorus written" → "have the c[horus] written" per the source
 * "will be released on October 31," → "would be released on October 21," per the source
 * "Its deluxe edition was" → "The deluxe edition was"

Composition

 * "Its subject matter revolves around her" → "The subject matter revolves around Trainor's"
 * "and it's still a party."" → "and it's still a party."" per the source
 * "a cappella song built on harmonies and features" → "a cappella song, built on harmonies and featuring"
 * "after her pregnancy, and an exercise" → "after her pregnancy and a challenge"
 * I would suggest using something more encyclopaedic than rear end
 * [8][15] only [8] should be used for the "Shook" sentence; the previous one shall invoke both
 * I think how it's done currently is fine as well due to the absence of any direct quotes here.


 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic guitar
 * The first sentence about "Superwoman" needs the ref invoked again, as it uses direct quotes
 * "that dismissed common narratives" → "that dismisses typical narratives"
 * "and acknowledged difficulties faced" → "and acknowledges difficulties faced"
 * "she thought would resonate with moms on" → "she thought would resonate with those on" to be more encyclopaedic
 * "give your heart a break"." → "give your heart a break."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences and invoke the ref here too
 * None of the "Remind Me" info is sourced
 * ? All of the "Remind Me" info occurs in the Yahoo! source directly following the quote.


 * "The album closes with" → "Takin' It Back closes with"
 * [9][27][28] should be invoked after all the "Mother" info, with only [9] at the end of the last sentence

Promotion

 * Mention that the performances were in the summer of 2022
 * "in the United States on" → "in the US on" per MOS:US, but the archive does not source this
 * "and the United Kingdom." → "and the UK." per consistency with above
 * Start a new para at the Today performance

Critical reception

 * Merge with the below section and retitle to Reception
 * The article only has five sections of prose so I would rather not. This section is too huge and it would swallow up the the part about the Commercial performance, whereas I think both of these parts deserve to be highlighted separately and a merged section doesn't transition well.


 * "He added, "this doesn't mean" → "He added, "This doesn't mean"
 * "Piatkowski thought it reflected" → "Piatkowski thought the album reflected"
 * "but believed its ballads," → "but believed the ballads,"
 * "after being controlled by her record label on previous releases;" → "after being controlled on previous releases;" per the source
 * "ventured into new musical territory and took" → "ventures into new musical territory and takes" for correct tense

Commercial performance

 * Make this the second para of the above section since one para is too short to stand alone
 * See above.


 * "Trainor's highest entry since her second major-label studio album," → "becoming Trainor's highest entry since her second major-label studio album"
 * I'd suggest only mentioning top 50 positions here, as below is not notable for prose
 * Given the dearth of international chart entries for this album, I think the very few ones can all be comfortably mentioned.

Track listing

 * Pipe Maureen McDonald to Mozella

Personnel

 * Pipe Ajay Bhattacharyya to Stint (producer)
 * Pipe Theron Theron to R. City

Charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; I did this just for you at a rapid pace! --K. Peake 10:52, 11 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for the in-depth review, K. Peake! All addressed I hope.--NØ 15:58, 11 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I did some slight copy editing and this is now ready to go! --K. Peake 19:55, 11 April 2023 (UTC)