Talk:The Texas Chain Saw Massacre/Archive 7

Edit request from LadyGreensleeves, 25 August 2010
The Texas Chainsaw Massacre 1-Please, add the verb to be "are" in "The film stars (are) Marilyn Burns, Gunnar Hansen, Teri McMinn, William Vail, Edwin Neal, and Paul A. Partain.". I think it would look much better.

2-Also, you could change "Principal photography for the film took place / The film's principal photography took place..

3- "The Texas Chain Saw Massacre has gained a reputation as one of the greatest and most influential horror films in the history of film"

4- Initially, the film drew a mixed >> Initially, the movie drew (I think it's better if you use a synonym because in the last two sentences the word film is repeated twice and with this one three times)

5- As a result of the film's content, several foreign jurisdictions banned the film >>  Movie

6- It originated several elements common in the slasher film genre >>  several common elements in...

7- including the characterization of the killer as a large, hulking and faceless figure, and the use of power tools as murder weapons.

PLOT

1- and her brother, Franklin (Paul A. Partain) >> no need of the comma over here. "and her brother Franklin (Paul A. Partain)

2- the group force him out of the van. >> forces if we consider the group acting as a unit, then we take it as singular.

3- The group later stop at a gas station to refuel their vehicle >> Later on, the group stops at a gas station

4- and the couple head off to find it. >> couple heads off

5-Kirk enters the house, where Leatherface >> the house where Leatherface

6- Pam enters soon after, finding the house filled with furniture made from human bones >>  Pam enters soon after and finds the house.. (I think it'd be better to use this form since you've already used the same phrase right above)

7-Sally's boyfriend Jerry heads out from >> Sally's boyfriend, Jerry, heads out...

8-He drives to the house, arriving at the same time as the hitchhiker, who turns out to be Leatherface's younger brother >> He drives to the house and he arrives at the sameBold text time... (if not, it would give the idea that he arrives at the house at the same moment he is driving)

9- When the pair bring Sally inside >> the pair brings

10- The men torment the bound and gagged Sally, while Leatherface, now dressed as a woman, serves dinner >> ..gagged Sally while Leatherface, now dressed as a woman, (no commas between Sally and while)

11- and is hit in the face with a large wrench wielded by the driver. >>> and he is hit

These are some corrections, but I will continue later on with the other part of the article.

LadyGreensleeves (talk) 17:33, 25 August 2010 (UTC)

Not done: Welcome. Since you have registered, it might make more sense to wait a few days until you are autoconfirmed so that you can make these changes yourself. I also see that a number of the changes you request here are exchanging one valid wording for another. (e.g.: "The film stars ..." where 'stars' is a verb versus "The film stars are...", where 'stars' is a noun. (In this example, did you mean "The film's stars are..."?)) In general, changes from one correct form to another create more heat than light and many editors will try to leave well enough alone unless there is a clear benefit to the change or it is part of some larger change. You may want to err on the side of minimizing conflict until you have more experience here. Good luck and, again, welcome. Celestra (talk) 18:15, 25 August 2010 (UTC)

Ok. Thank you for your comment. Then it means that I have to have experience in order to edit or to give my opinion? I thought that editing was not only about "mistakes" but also about style. I don't mean to say that I am right about everything and that is why, all my corrections should be the only valid ones. Anyways, my idea was not to create "conflict" but I guess It was a mistake to try to help and join the community. Thanks again. Regards. LadyGreensleeves (talk) 00:19, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

spelling error
second paragraph, "development" section. Grammatical error. It's "learnt" not "learned".
 * This article is American English. It's "learned" in AmEng; "learnt" sounds "backwoodsy" to American ears, although it's of course perfectly good British English. - Dank (push to talk) 13:31, 30 August 2010 (UTC)

Another spelling error: 'Chainsaw' isn't two words. Not one of the 1974 movie poster makes it two words, so I'm not sure why Wikipedia has it wrong. Perhaps the mistake originates with IMDB.org.


 * No, the original title of the film spells it Chain Saw, as is apparent in the opening of the film, all subsequent films spell it as Chainsaw.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 17:30, 18 October 2010 (UTC)

grammatical error revision
apologies, the error is in the sixth line of the casting paragraph. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.184.136.79 (talk) 01:44, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

Copyediting
I didn't copyedit the last section or the subsection on "Development"; I think those need someone who's more familiar with WP:FILM. In the two sections after "Development", the temperatures are mentioned 4 times; that could be tighter. - Dank (push to talk) 15:07, 2 September 2010 (UTC)
 * "being an exception ... with the exception of Leatherface" needs rewording. - Dank (push to talk) 15:52, 2 September 2010 (UTC)

Bryanston Pictures or Bryanston Distributing Co.
I know they are two different things, but sources are conflicted as to whether the film was released under Bryanston Pictures or the main distributing company. See and. I was thinking of changing the distributor in the infobox to Bryanston Pictures. Also, off this topic, does anybody feel the intro paragraphs may need a bit of expansion, a lot of film articles seem to have quite large paragraphs.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 15:23, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The film itself should identify them in the credits. As for the leads, I would say they could be expanded upon a bit more.   BIGNOLE     (Contact me)  15:28, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Ah, thanks. I'll be checking that out. As for the leads, I'm not really good with that sort of stuff, but I might look into expanding it.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 15:32, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * It's odd. I didn't find any references to Bryanston in the film's credits.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 15:40, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * So what now? -- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 20:03, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * It's probably best to just use the one that says "Distribution".   BIGNOLE     (Contact me)  20:29, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * I guess. I still find it odd though, because of the conflicting sources. I think it was released under Bryanston Pictures, which was part of Bryanston Distribution Co, which is possibly what the sources are going for. There seems to be more results for Bryanston Pictures than the Distribution Co.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 20:37, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * We could pipelink it [Bryanston Distributing Company|Bryanston Pictures].-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 20:37, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Also, are there any suggestions for expanding the leads? Like I said, I'm not really sure what to put.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 17:46, 22 November 2010 (UTC)


 * I've got a full plate with work right now, but if I have some free time over the holiday I'll try and take a look at it and expand.   BIGNOLE     (Contact me)  17:59, 22 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks, I'd appreciate it. And would it be OK to change the distributor to Bryanston Pictures? In the end it doesn't seem to much of a problem.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 18:15, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Which source is the most reliable? Whichever one is, use what they claim it to be.  BIGNOLE     (Contact me)  18:26, 22 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The Chain Saw Companion by Jaworzyn, Cinefantastique and John Kenneth Muir's book all seem pretty reliable, and they list it under Bryanston Pictures.-- The Taerkasten ( talk ) 18:30, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Intro expansion
I like the look of the into, but feel that the paragraphs could be expanded a bit. If anybody can help out, I'd really appreciate it.-- TÆRkast  ( Communicate ) 20:17, 20 December 2010 (UTC)

Good luck, guys


I know y'all have been through the wringer on this article with all the FACs. I hope you get it over the hump to feel the satisfaction. You have a "killer" (pun intended) daily hit count. You are working on something people read...that matters.

TCO (talk) 16:06, 16 January 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks, I think you meant this one instead lol. Honestly, if this year isn't the year for this article, I might leave the project. I don't want to, but I think three years for a single article is enough. -- TÆRkast  ( Communicate ) 17:10, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Chain Saw vs Chainsaw
I'm wondering why the title of this article uses Chain Saw (two words) instead of Chainsaw (one word). Even the movie poster shown has it as one word, and in the article itself, it is used as one word far more than two words. If this was just to differentiate between the 1974 film and the 2003 remake, you could've just had "1974 Film" in parentheses. Confused. :-? BucsWeb (talk) 15:35, 3 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Did you see the note in the lead next to the name? That's where it is explained.   BIGNOLE     (Contact me)  15:43, 3 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Correct, the official name of the film is the compound Chain Saw, but many references are made to it with the one word variation. There has also been previous discussion about this in the archives. -- Tærkast  ( Communicate ) 17:36, 3 March 2011 (UTC)

Move discussion in progress
There is a move discussion in progress on Talk:The Texas Chainsaw Massacre which affects this page. Please participate on that page and not in this talk page section. Thank you. —RM bot 16:01, 22 March 2011 (UTC)