Talk:Timothy M. Carney

Good Article review 2
Reviewer: Exoplanetaryscience (talk · contribs) 00:13, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Lead section & infobox
Looking at the beginning article, I see no primary issues. While the beginning summarizes Mr. Carney well, the infobox could use some more references, as it has none at all for the data in it.

Foreign service career
In terms of bias, the article doesn't appear to have much flattering phrases or terms, but I get a slight impression that whoever wrote it was writing it with a pro-Carney opinion in mind. I think that if it were to become a good article, that should be changed.

Haiti democracy project, Clinton-Bush Haiti Fund, and Personal Life
While the Haiti Democracy Project paragraph, like the rest of this article, has quite a bit of 'meat' to it, and sums it up, it is lacking quite a bit on links. That would be quite helpful to add. The second section about the Clinton-Bush Haiti Fund is fine, and I have no complaints. Lastly it would be helpful if you added some more to 'personal life' because it's kind of lacking in content at the moment.

Overall references
Finally, I want to highlight the fact that of the 39 citations, 17 of them go to the first reference. This is a primary problem with the article, considering it relies largely on the first reference for things. To pass, this should be changed.

Result: Fail

Summary: Add more references than #1, add more to 'personal life' and be slightly less biased on the article. Um, excuse me, but I believe that this is an inappropriate review, given that I started it today and you are to give a person time to respond to your comments. Montanabw (talk) 06:11, 21 October 2014 (UTC)