Talk:Trial of David Amoss

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 31 August 2021 and 15 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Hagerjm, Deitrichem.

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peer review
1. What did this article do well, and what impressed me? I liked the flow of the article and overall description of events, I feel it allowed for the article to have a nice pace and not get to boring or slow. I also believe it was very informative for the source material. 2. What changes would I suggest and how would they help? The primary change I'd recommend would be that you do not need as many quotes as you use, for the most part you are suppose to use your own words and, if you feel you must use quotes, use them for sections where the subject is explained quickly and well; you use yours to explain what happened in the series of events rather than to simply explain something, again for the most part I feel you should find ways to rewrite it in your own words. I feel this will help with the feel of the article as it did feel awkward with quotes coming up continuously. Besides this I'd also recommend adding more details throughout the article because I felt that in some places, while well written was lacking in detail, however this does mostly come from how good your source is and what your working with. 3. The most important change? Overall, if there has to be one change it would be to use less direct quotes, I feel it should only be done as a last resort and most of the article, if not all, should be in your own words. 4. What did I like that I could use in my own article? I rather enjoyed the simplicity of the set up for the article, I feel I tend to over think mine because I feel that everything needs its own position but seeing this article still being able to keep things organized with only three main parts I think I can shorten mine down as well. Heatleymd (talk) 04:36, 29 February 2020 (UTC)Heatleymd

Peer Review
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? The article does a great job at capturing the many elements outside of the trial itself, including relevant background information about what made the trial of Dr. Amoss significant and the community reaction. It made the article feel quite complete and I have a good understanding of who David Amoss was, and the consistent use of specific names is great because it is specific to who did what during the event.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I would suggest adding links throughout the article, specifically to the “Night Riders,” “Planters Protective Association,” and “Hopkinsville Raid” if possible. Links will help develop the reader’s understanding by leading them to other articles. You included some short quotes that might be able to easily be changed into paraphrasing. I am working on changing this about my article too, but it seems that some quotes don’t need to be quotes, if that makes sense. For example, the quote "both the Planters' Protective Association and the Night Riders seem anachronistic." could be paraphrased. Especially because the word “anachronistic” isn’t very common, and it would be beneficial to change the word into one that would be more familiar to a wide audience of readers.

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? The most important thing in my opinion would be to make the trial section more concise, and maybe break it into even more subsections. It is very detailed and that’s great, but I think the paragraphs could be cleaned up for easier flow and readability. A more specific suggestion of mine is that you describe how a man named Axiom Cooper was shot and killed, and then you briefly mention his trial at the beginning of the “trial” subsection. I would suggest adding that there was a trial for Axiom Cooper’s death in the same section you describe his shooting, it just felt out of place.

4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I liked how the trial was broken up into a timeline sections clarifying the before and during of the trial. I will consider organizing the events of my article this way because I have a similar timeline of events. Ramizlf (talk) 23:18, 27 February 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review

1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? I liked how you went into depth explaining both Amoss's activities and his trial. These two topics build off of each other and allow the reader to fully understand the significance and context of the event they are reading about.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Using quote snippets are often an effective tool to use while writing an article. However, I think you might be a bit too reliant on quote snippets rather than explaining things in your own words. Also, at the beginning of the fifth paragraph under the subheading titled: "Before the Trial", you mention that Amoss was charged for violating the "Klu Klux Law". Technically, the law should be titled the "Ku Klux Law". (no "L" in the word "Ku".) However, if the law is actually titled "Klu Klux", you should keep the current spelling.

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? I would just go back and change some of the quote snippets into your own words; other than that, I think your pretty much good to go.

4. Did you notice anything about the article you revised that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! Despite my suggestion that you should use less quote snippets, I definitely think that I, myself, need to use more quotes for my article.

--MJVH2097 (talk) 19:30, 28 February 2020 (UTC)

Feedback from New Page Review process
I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Thanks for writing this article on a historic trial. Excellent job!.

—  Newslinger  talk   03:45, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

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