Talk:Windows XP/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 23:28, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  23:28, 20 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Check the "External links" part of the GA toolbox. Some of the links are dead or are linking to completely different things.
 * You will have to check each reference to see if they still link to the thing you want.
 * ✅ All references checked and furnished with archive links. Ones that were either dead or seemingly not relevant have been removed or replaced. The 'too many refs in one place' issue below may still exist, I've not checked thoroughly for that yet. ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 23:46, 23 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "Improvements were also made to IntelliMirror features such as Offline Files, Roaming user profiles and Folder redirection."
 * ✅ -- ChamithN   (talk)  05:37, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Second paragraph of UI needs references.
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * File:RoyaleXP2.PNG's caption should also include that the menu shown is the Royale theme.
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:47, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Other features need a reference for each point
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 17:57, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * What is IME (expand abbreviation)?
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:47, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Removed features section is unreferenced.
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 11:38, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * ", and in boxed copies." Remove comma.
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:47, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * "SP2 added new functionality to Windows XP, such as WPA encryption compatibility and improved Wi-Fi support (with a wizard utility), a pop-up ad blocker for Internet Explorer 6, and partial Bluetooth support."
 * What improvements did the Wi-fi support have?
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 16:05, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Features of SP3 fit better in prose, and they also need references.
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 18:31, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Link logical processor, and there's no need to go into detail what it is
 * ✅ ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:47, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Avoid starting sentences with the same words/phrase.
 * ✅ I could only find one or two examples of this - if I've missed any, please do let me know. ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 15:25, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Avoid having too many references at a time.
 * ✅ - see here ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 10:14, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "According to web analytics data" repeats three times in Market share section. Get rid of it or reword it.
 * ✅ - I've removed the latter two paragraphs, as they don't really add any information not provided elsewhere. ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 09:47, 22 June 2018 (UTC)


 * References need various things that is needed to be completed. For example, access dates, publishers, dates, authors, etc.
 * ✅ I believe I've fixed them all! Some references didn't list authors or publication dates, but I've added blank (i.e. |author=&lt;!--N/A--> ) parameters to those. ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 20:23, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Images are copyrighted, but there are no realistic alternatives.
 * Yeah, unfortunately there aren't any suitable alternatives - we need to show the operating system's UI, and can only really do that by using non-free content. So this is a .  ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 20:23, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

Plenty of things to fix before it becomes a GA. Nova Crystallis   (Talk)  05:03, 22 June 2018 (UTC)

A few more things:
 * Ref 2 is a bare ref and needs citation form.
 * Last bullet point of Other features needs the ref fixed.
 * Ref 16, 20, 31, 45, and 84 needs consistent date formats.
 * Ref 99 needs to be fixed.

Getting there. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  20:29, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * thanks for this, all ✅. ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 20:53, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Passing the article. Nova Crystallis   (Talk)  22:52, 24 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Fantastic - thanks! ƒirefly  ( t · c · who? ) 00:49, 25 June 2018 (UTC)