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Okay, I have a few more suggestions. Apologies for my extensive use of the talk quotes template.

Put this in chronological order: In November 1914, the Iowans of Kossuth County voted against the creation of Larrabee County. The county was preceded by Crocker County until it was disestablished being illegal. A referendum was held in Kossuth County in order to propose the existence of Larrabee County. The proposal failed and Kossuth County remained the largest county in Iowa.
In the “Background” section, making Iowa a state of X counties is repetitive.
On February 22, 1913, Larrabee County was proposed by James McHose, an Iowa congressman from Boone, Iowa. Change to “the creation of Larrabee County was proposed…” or something like that?
If Larrabee County was to be created, it would consist of the north one third of Township 97, all of Townships 98, 99 and 100 north, of ranges 27, 28, 29 and 30 west of the fifth principal meridian in the state of Iowa. Excuse my lack of related knowledge, but I’m still a little confused by this. What is township 100 north, a range, and 30 west of the fifth principal meridian in the state of Iowa?
Lowercase Township in sentence above and change one third to “one-third”.
Portrait of William Larrabee, who the county was to be named after. Change to “Portrait of William Larrabee, after whom the county was to be named.”
Try to decrease the use of footnotes. For example, correct me if I’m wrong, but the first one is already used is the “References” section, so could be deleted.
Possible replace the map of Bancroft County into one of what Larrabee would’ve been (though they’re virtually the same).
If it’s possible to reword or write it another way, I think that mentioning the fact that “Kossuth is Iowa’s biggest county” three times is a little much.

This is just overall, I haven’t really looked at sourcing or smaller details. Looking at the FA criteria (as I think the A-class one varies depending on the WikiProject and the overall one isn’t very specific):

1a. The prose could be cleared up. Grammar-wise, it’s alright, though a little hard to understand/out of order at times.
1b. Pretty comprehensive save some minor issues.
1c. Well researched, although the sourcing could be cleared up and a few more sources could be found (like I said though, I haven’t had the time to look at that yet).
1d. Yes.
1e. Yes.
1f. Yes, if your GA Earwig assessment was correct.
2a. Yes.
2b. Not much structure, but it’s a short article, so yes.
2c. Haven’t check citations yet.
3. Yes, but I haven’t checked for copyright yet (this should’ve been done for the GAN anyway).
4. Yes.

Really, this is a pretty good article. If this passed A-class though, you would likely nominate it for FA. I’m a little worried about notability and length right now, however. There’s not that many sources discussing this right now, and if this became a FA, it would be one of, if not the shortest FAs on Wikipedia.

I suggest requesting a copy-edit from the Guild of Copy-Editors sometime after you make these edits. I might have more ideas later, depending on what the article looks like.

If I’m not wrong, for A-class, you have to nominate through a WikiProject? So either WP History or WP United States. Let me know if/when/where you nominate. Sorry for making this ridiculously long. Cheers, ~~~~