User:Nsabo/sandbox

Week 14 - Final Article
Added remaining text and references to locomotion subsection. I also added personal dissection picture to the gallery.

Week 13 - Continue Improving your article
Added a subsection for locomotion and added GIF to main stingray page.

Week 12 - Begin moving your work
Added one sentence to stingray main page. Put under behavior paragraph. Added citation manually to sentence.

Week 11 - Pictures
Personal dissection photo added of dorsal view of right fin from personal dissection. I will be adding these pics and information to the Stingray page.

Article Draft
The stingray uses Median Paired Fins (MPF) opposed to pure undulations by a singular caudal fin. Stingray pectoral fin locomotion can be divided into two categories undulatory and oscillatory. Stingrays who use undulatory locomotion have shorter thicker fins for slower motile movements in benthic areas. Longer thinner pectoral fins make for faster speeds in oscillation mobility in pelagic zones. Visually distinguishable oscillation has less than one wave going, opposed to undulation having more than one wave at all times.

Reply
The organization I plan on keeping relatively the same with some minor adjustments in links, citations, and footnotes. The largest concern seemed to be correlated with how I kept specifically to Wikipedia standards. We will be incorporating a single bibliography on the existing stingray page. I would be open to a collaboration with the person doing locomotion on the skate. In the suggestions for fish examples and big word definitions I will be adding links instead to keep the section simplified.

Revision
The stingray uses Median Paired Fins (MPF) opposed to pure undulations where the caudal fin is the source of locomotion. MPF provides quicker and more accurate movement needed for benthic organisms. The wave-like motion is performed by coordinated sequential movements between the pectoral and pelvic fins. The pectoral fins preform an undulation followed by a pelvic fin pull on the benthic floor.

Bats Peer Review and Copy Edit
The organization is done well on who will be contributing what portions. Subtitles would help to your organization for visual cues. Some of the work load seems disproportioned. There should be images with this portion or talk of what type of images you might be interested. You all have good starts to your chosen topics.

Vision: For week 6, I do not think the introduction of why you are adding this content is necessary. You have done a good job in summarizing the differences in vision between the two bats. This being a draft I am sure you know a lot more links could be added within the sentences. It seems to say microbats are the only ones with echolocation you may need to clarify.

Teeth: This section is nicely done for a lot of information on teeth and related functions. I would suggest you might not want to use comparisons between the two bats as your standalone information is sufficient.

Fluid intake: The information on fluid intake is well summarized. I would choose a different word than naked for describing their body structure. I would also specify the types of fluids they intake.

Flight: This is a lot information over the generalized advantages of flight. I would try and narrow the effects to specifically the microbat. Specificity could also help in relation to the shape or size relative to the microbat and the related advantages.

Turtle Peer Review and Copy Edit
The chosen contents are neutral, and the resources are reliable. The structure is well organized, but it offers more explanations than actual structure of a rough draft. The subtitles and resource portions are well organized, and it is easy to tell who will be contributing to which portions. There were no spelling or grammatical errors I could find. There was only one mention of proposed images you were going to include.

Neck retraction: The information is well done to explain the functions and integrated processes. The two sections could be divided more by specific topic. Yelena’s portion could be directed to form and function and Jackie’s could be more evolutionary. The subjects covered seem to lead to those subtopics already.

Respiration: The speculative ideas in the turtles’ respiration sound very intriguing. A possible association to evolutionary differences to discuss is their partial aquatic lifestyle. Their respiration may be contrasted to other aquatic organisms as well as terrestrial, possibly mammalian.

Article Draft
The stingray uses Median Paired Fins (MPF) opposed to pure undulations where the caudal fin is the source of locomotion. MPF provides quicker and more accurate movement needed for benthic organisms. The wave-like motion is performed by coordinated sequential movements between the pectoral and pelvic fins. The pectoral fins preform an undulation followed by a pelvic fin pull on the benthic floor.

Still looking for a proper picture showing the wave-like motion to add a visual to the description.

Bibliography continued
Macesic, L., Mulvaney, D., Blevins, E. 2013. Synchronized swimming: coordination of pelvic and pectoral fins during augmented punting by the freshwater stingray Potamotrygon orbignyi. Zoology. 116: 144-150.

Bottom II, R., Borazjani, I., Blevins, E., Lauder, G. 2016. Hydrodynamics of swimming in stingrays:numerical simulations and the role of the leading-edge vortex. Cam. Univ. Press. 788: 407-443.

Topic

 * Locomotion. The stingray uses Median Paired Fins (MPF) opposed to undulations where the caudal fin is the source of locomotion. MPF provides quicker and more accurate movement needed for shallower waters.

Week 4 - Assignment to group dissections

 * Skate. This cartilaginous fish interests me because of the pectoral fin adaptation for swimming in a wave-like movement. Fish fin
 * Bat. I find a winged mammal intriguing in the curiosity of comparison to other mammals. Microbat (mammalian traits)
 * Rattlesnake. I have a visceral reaction to snakes and with more knowledge it may lower my anxiety towards them. Envenomation

Week 3 - Add and Edit something on the page

 * changed the wording in the second sentence for clarification

Week 2 - Evaluate Wikipedia Page

 * some citations are little past the ten year framework
 * synapomorphies are referenced, but no reference to synapomorphies
 * things to add; food source, habitat, subcategories for structure
 * sentence structure could be better, some phrases poorly worded
 * Talk page lists complaints of lack of structure and references of material
 * the article has been rated as a "start article" giving it about a D rating
 * more citations are needed for a majority of facts

Week 1 - Cephalochordate

 * received Wikipedia page to edit