User talk:Erinbb1

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Great article! You did a good job putting the course material into this assignment. Other than a few grammatical errors and sentence structure issues I think you are essentially done. Since Professor Berik wants us to make a talk page contribution, I will have to give you my feedback piece by piece. I will start from the top of the page and work down (mostly sentence structure revisions). Sorry that this might not make a whole lot of sense, but I am working on this on a bus driving across Colorado, good thing for 3G.

First paragraph 1. Yours: Though these women are looking for better job opportunities, they are often left with low skilled jobs, and have vulnerability to abuse. Mine: Though these women are looking for better job opportunities, they are often left with low skilled jobs, and are vulnerable to abuse.

2. You say the same thing twice a few sentences down: “Women migrants work in domestic occupations which are considered part of the informal sector and lack a degree of government regulation and protection. Women migrants work in occupations that are considered part of the informal sector and lack a degree of government regulation and protection.”

3. Look at the last two words in last sentence in the first paragraph “Though seen in the Economic section, there is no solid data on the economic impact of women migrant workers, save remittances.”

Feminization of Migration

1. Migration patterns have CHANGED dramatically over the past 50 years. 2. Yours: These women often end up in gender-segregated positions of low status. They are often unskilled and uneducated. Mine: These women often en up in gender- segregated positions of low status, because they are often unskilled and uneducated

Why women Migrate

1. Yours: Developing countries have precarious job markets, and finding employment that can support a family can be a hardship to those who need an extra income to make ends meet, or need any income at all. Mine: Developing counties have precarious job markets, and finding employment can be difficult, especially for low income/low education women.

-Andrew — Preceding unsigned comment added by Javaman1145 (talk • contribs) 03:27, 19 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Javaman1145:

Thank you for your input. I am reevaluating my language in those areas and making the necessary changes. Erinbb1 (talk) 00:39, 23 April 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on your new article
Hi, Erin! I see you've been working on the Women migrant workers' article. Looks like you've done a lot of research to get it where it is now. I wanted to recommend breaking the paragraphs within each section up a bit (not necessarily into new sections—just into more accessible paragraphs), especially the lead paragraph (the summary before the table of contents). I think it will make more people read your interesting article. Hope that makes sense to you; keep up the good work! Jami430 (talk) 06:08, 19 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Jami430:

Can do. Thank you. I will separate things a little better. I am also making a few subsections. Erinbb1 (talk) 00:41, 23 April 2013 (UTC)

Tags on your article
Hi, Erin, First of all, your article really was quite well written, and about a relevant, useful subject. The tags I placed are not intended as a criticism of your work so far. The only one that was in fact a critique is that your article style is a bit closer to a scholarly journal article than an encyclopedia article, but that's just a matter of using a different tone in certain areas, and maybe a little work on the lead section. The rest of the tags are purely technical - the orphan tag and the bare links tags are just to get this article incorporated into the main body of the encyclopedia and keep its references up to date. Again, thanks for editing and I hope you continue on Wikipedia! - Jorgath (talk) (contribs) 20:15, 19 April 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on your new article
Erin,

Your article is looking wonderful. Looks like all your information is on point and I liked the overall organization. I have a just a couple of suggestions. My first suggestion would be to combine the sections Why women migrate and Feminization of migration. I think those two topics can be organically combined under the Feminization of migration I think as a question why women migrate can be answered in explaining how migration is becoming more feminized. The only other thing I was left wondering about are their children maybe adding a section or even just expanding on specifically how this gender specific migration effects their kids you could just add this to your gender role section. Over all great job keep up the good work. Jdoulas (talk) 22:52, 21 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Jdoulas:

I will consolidate them. Thank your for your feedback and reading the article. Erinbb1 (talk) 00:44, 23 April 2013 (UTC)