User talk:Jaditol/Beef noodle soup

Feedback from Kaylea
Hi, I'm starting to walk through articles and give everyone informal early feedback on how they're doing. You'll notice this is a little bit form-letter-ish but I hope it is still helpful!

I don't see your article, though, or at least not in the spot where I expected it. Can you point me to the location of the article you are working on? Thanks!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 23:53, 25 January 2022 (UTC)

Draft Found!
Thanks for the pointer in section today. I see your work now, and am comparing the current state with the original using this link:

https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3AJaditol%2FBeef_noodle_soup&type=revision&diff=1067209404&oldid=1068476778

To me it looks like you made several good additions and are making good progress. One thing to consider as you keep working is your use of sources. You should be aware that Wikipedia does not consider baidu to be a reliable source because it is self-published and does not use a high standard for editorial control -- see policy here https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Reliable_sources/Perennial_sources and extensive discussion here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Mirrors_and_forks/Baidu_Baike

Kaylea Champion (talk) 21:28, 28 January 2022 (UTC)

Feedback Viewed
Hey Kaylea, Thank you for checking it out and I will definitely work on my sources! Jaditol (talk) 19:45, 2 February 2022 (UTC)

Updated feedback
Hi

You are making good progress. One thing that I notice in this version is that the Lead section has drifted a little bit away from what is expected. You want the lead to summarize the article. Often each major section from the article will be summarized into at most one sentence in the lead, and then the section has all the details to explain the summary. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Lead_section

I also see some need for copyediting. Keep going, this is getting closer.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 19:35, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Go Live Approval
Hi

You are approved to go live! I made a tweak to the lead, I hope it looks ok.

One quick fix for you -- it looks like the translation box appears twice. When you're copying your article over, make sure to only copy this bit once.

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:


 * 1) Final read-through draft.
 * 2) Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
 * 3) Two browsers side by side, if you can. Source editing mode ("Code mode"), not visual editor.
 * 4) Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
 * 5) Note on article talk page.
 * 6) Note at the top of your sandbox version.
 * 7) Submit a link to your article on Canvas.
 * 8) Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 16:25, 11 February 2022 (UTC)