User talk:VC4396

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Peer Review
I thought the content of the paper was thoughtful, unbiased, and provided great detail. A major critique I had was on your sourcing, as I noticed a few paragraphs were directly copied from the websites you used. Though the information is accurate, I think you just need to be bit more explicit with your citations, so as not to run into any trouble with copyright/Wikipedia. In terms of structure, I was a little confused with your numbered headings as they were not in any particular order, nor were they bolded. Were these supposed to be headings? I think you had much to say about women of color but I noticed that throughout the article, you added facts here and there regarding women of color and it seemed a bit out of place. I would suggest just keeping it organized/consistent or adjusting the headings so that it flows. The data/statistics were very beneficial to the article and put things into perspective! I would just add that there were times when you spelled the number (i.e. ten) vs. times when wrote it in number form (i.e. 10) so I would just keep that consistent. Also, the beginning bullet points were a little confusing because I didn't feel as though I had a clear idea of why they had been placed there so maybe just adjust the intro those points? Overall, really enjoyed reading it! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jennifer.norris (talk • contribs) 01:19, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Edits (sammie kearney):

-	Link to the ERA wiki page when you mention it in your writing -	Include more in depth citations -	Go more in depth about the politics behind liberal and radical feminism—particularly why liberal feminists support the ERA and others do not -	It remains neutral and present specific citations of numbers and statistics that make the wage gaps existence more visible—just needs formal citations -	Could possibly incorporate more theory or perspective of Marxist feminists? -	Make the divisions between sections more clear through the use of headings and sub-headings -	Assuming citations will be added and the format will be edited I think this article will add extremely useful info to wiki Sammiek (talk) 17:07, 9 November 2016 (UTC)sammiek