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The article was promoted by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 21:44, 27 March 2017.

White-naped xenopsaris

 * Nominator(s): Sabine's Sunbird  talk  07:22, 7 March 2017 (UTC)

The latest from WP:BIRD. This species is pretty obscure, and the article is shorter than many we produce because of that. But everything that can be said about this species is there. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  07:22, 7 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments from FunkMonk

 * I'll review this soon. FunkMonk (talk) 11:02, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
 * "the same 1989 study that linked Xenopsaris to Pachyramphus." But wasn't this already believed? The sentence makes it sound like it was a novel conclusion.
 * Clarified


 * "were found to actually formed a fourth family" Form?
 * fixed


 * "and Psaris, a genus erected by Georges Cuvier" Genus of what?
 * synonym of Tityra, added


 * "The subspecies X. a. minor is has"
 * Fixed


 * "ti-ti-ti-ti", according to the Handbook of the Birds of the World." It seems a bit odd that you only make in-text attribution here in the description?
 * It's a direct lift of how they represented it, not something I wrote myself. If it's fine to cite inline I'll change


 * "where their ranges overlap in Venezuela." I get what you mean, but I can't help but think "wouldn't they look similar anywhere?
 * Clarified


 * "from June to September,[14] but the Austral summer in Argentina (October to January)." Not sure what the but is meant for.
 * clarified


 * "unusual in suboscine birds" The term is not used in the linked article. Is it a valid grouping?
 * removed birds


 * Image review - let's get this part over with; all licenses and sources are fine, but I wonder whether a range map could be added? FunkMonk (talk) 15:26, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I'll see if I can get/make one


 * You should replace the pixel forcing of the horizontal drawing with the "upright" parameter. Then the image will scale according to which screen it is viewed from.
 * Removed pixel forcing, will play with upright parameter when I get home


 * The drawing could also be left aligned, so that the subject "faces" the text. Also, why do you use the binomial in the caption?
 * I've never understood the fixation with having images look inwards, but I'll see how it looks left aligned on my huge screen at work before changing.
 * It's not too important, just looks slightly better... FunkMonk (talk) 21:01, 7 March 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! Sabine's Sunbird  talk  17:43, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Last issue; "It lives in open savannah" only stated in intro.
 * removed


 * Support - looks fine to me now (don't forget the upright parameter!). FunkMonk (talk) 09:28, 8 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments from Riley
Quick comments first:
 * In the 2nd para of the lead, I feel like it may be good to tone down the ", and" thing. It just gets repetitive.
 * Fixed


 * In the breeding section, the sentence "They are constructed from woven plant fibre and a few rootlets, or fine dry grass," could either mean: They construct their nest with either just the plant fibers and rootlets, or with just the fine dry grass; or it could be taken to mean that they always construct it with woven plant fiber and use either rootlets or fine dry grass.
 * Fixed
 * Still is a bit confusing, maybe split the sentences?
 * How so? Nests have been found constructed one way, or another way. I tried rewording


 * The flow is weird in the sentence "The hatchlings are dark-skinned with grey down, and pink mouths." Removing the comma should fix it.
 * Done


 * In the 2nd para of the taxonomy section, you have, in parentheses, the family name. Yet, you do that pretty much nowhere else.
 * Removed


 * Only Oxford comma inconsistency I really see is in the sentence "The species is also known as the reed becard, white-naped becard, and simply xenopsaris." There might be more, though.
 * Removed

And that's all for now. Good luck! RileyBugz Yell at me &#124; Edits  21:30, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Sabine's Sunbird  talk  04:49, 8 March 2017 (UTC)

Now for some more:
 * In the sentence "The species is not common and little is known about it, but it is not considered in danger of extinction, and has been classified as of Least Concern by the International Union for Conservation of Nature," "least concern" should be lowercase, like it is on its Wikipedia page.
 * Done


 * Add a comma before the genus name in the sentence "Burmeister originally placed it in the the becard genus Pachyramphus," so that it is clear that Pachyramphus is the becard genus.
 * sure


 * Add "to" in the sentence "When placed with the tyrant-flycatchers, Tyrannidae, it was considered closely related the genera Suiriri, Serpophaga and Knipolegus."
 * done


 * Link "Tityridae" in the 3rd para of taxonomy.
 * Done


 * First time genus Tityra is mentioned, so maybe add something about how it was proposed that it was closely linked to that genus, before the sentence "A 2007 study of mitochondrial DNA confirmed the white-naped xenopsaris' place in the Tityridae, and its close relationship to both Pachyramphus and the genus Tityra."
 * The 1989 study didn't find support the close relationship, that's something that came out in 2007. Reworded slightly to introduce the tityrias.


 * Reword the sentence "The female is similar to the male except duller overall, and the crown is tinged with chestnut," maybe to "The female is similar to the male, but is duller overall and has a chestnut-tinged crown."
 * okay


 * Add "being" in the sentence "The initial trill is described as rising and then falling, and the last trill is described as long," before "long" and after "as".
 * Done


 * In the sentence "In 2006 the species was reported for the first time in Peru, but it was unclear if this represented a vagrant escaping cold weather or a migrant, as the species is mostly uncommon across its range and that area is poorly studied ornithologically," "ornithologically" isn't needed and is a bit of a big term, per say.
 * I think it's worth clarifying, but I did link the term


 * En dash should be used instead of hyphen in the sentence "Both sexes incubate the eggs during the 14-15 day brooding period."
 * Bloody mdashes. Sigh. Done


 * Capitalization of "least concern" in the sentence "For these reasons, it is evaluated as being Least Concern."
 * Done


 * It would be nice to see a range map.
 * It would. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  04:02, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I can make one, what source should it be based on? FunkMonk (talk) 09:02, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
 * HBW. I was going to dust of GIMP and do it on the weekend though. I was just being a smart alec. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  09:11, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Oh, didn't see this, so made a map. Seems the illustration of the bird should be moved to the left just so it doesn't clash with the taxobox... FunkMonk (talk) 18:43, 10 March 2017 (UTC)
 * No drama, thanks for the map! Love the illustration as suggested. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  18:50, 10 March 2017 (UTC)

And that is all! Again, good luck! RileyBugz Yell at me &#124; Edits  21:36, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Anything else?. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  17:40, 13 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Shoot. Temporary support, pending me getting better. Feel free to promote if I don't respond further, just so I don't hold this up. RileyBugz Yell at me  &#124; Edits  18:10, 13 March 2017 (UTC)

Support Comments from Jim
Never heard of this one! Nitpicks follow Jimfbleak - talk to me?
 * It was entirely unfamiliar to me before I started too. Comments below. Sabine's Sunbird   talk  16:56, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
 * a small tityrid&mdash;pointless repeat imho
 * removed


 * The genus name Xenopsairs… &mdash;you should give the source language in this sentence, Ancient Greek or Latin as appropriate. Also add that Psaris is from Gr. psar, starling. Let me know if you need a ref for that
 * done


 * nominate subspecies &mdash;link
 * linked


 * wing coverts &mdash;covert feathers are not flight feathers, which is your current link.
 * fixed


 * You mention only the wing chord length of minor, might as well give the tail length too.
 * I thought about this but decided not to. Bird measurements like this are not interesting except insofar as they establish size differences between different taxa or populations. I think its enough to establish that one is bigger than the other and provide an example, but if you disagree I can put tail in


 * In the Diet section, the subject of all the sentences beginning They is Chicks in the nest, not what you intended I think.
 * Fixed


 * Nesting timing varies by location, in Venezuela is reported &mdash; missing word?
 * Fixed


 * 11,000,000 km2 (4,200,000 sq mi). &mdash;Would look neater templated to give million as word instead of string of zeroes, but your call.
 * How do I do that? Can't work it out on the template page


 * Your final ref from Hornero needs italics for the binomial
 * fixed
 * I'm happy with those responses. I've fixed the "million" bit in the text, it's not exactly intuitive, even the space being necessary. Changed to support above, good luck Jimfbleak - talk to me?  07:17, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Saving the millions coding to my user page if I need it later ;) Sabine's Sunbird  talk  07:36, 9 March 2017 (UTC)

Support Comments from Cas Liber
Taking a look now...
 * although it was long still known to be closely related to Pachyramphus.  - this is ambiguous and sounds odd. Presumably you mean after it was moved to new genus?
 * Fixed I think
 * .. which overlaps in range in Venezuela. - sounds odd - "which overlaps its range in Venezuela." (?)
 * Changed
 *  The white-naped xenopsaris differs from the cincerous becard in being smaller... - repetitive, could say, " The white-naped xenopsaris is smaller" or " The former (differs from the latter) in being smaller" or something
 * Changed.

Otherwise looks pretty good. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:40, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Cheers. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  17:50, 12 March 2017 (UTC)

Support on prose per my standard disclaimer. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 03:59, 15 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the edits and support. I was amused that one of the edits undid a change requested above. My only quibble was linking to species description when referring to a generic description. I feel it's a deficiency of the target article, but I think I'll unlink it. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  04:10, 15 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for undoing the link to species description; it would be nice to have something to link to, but I can't find a suitable article, or a suitable section of species description. Which edit undid something ... species of least concern? - Dank (push to talk) 13:07, 15 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I feel it would optimal for species description to be a bit wider in breadth rather than having a new article, but that's an aside to here. All you undid was the insertion of being in the sentence about calls. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  17:31, 15 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I see it now. "The initial trill rises then falls" would be my preference, unless there's a reason to suggest that there's some question or doubt, which the current language does (by saying that it's only described that way). - Dank (push to talk) 17:39, 15 March 2017 (UTC)

Coordinator comment: Unless I've missed it, we still need a source review which can be requested in the usual place. Sarastro1 (talk) 22:52, 24 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry, been a while since I've done one of these, what is the usual place? Sabine's Sunbird  talk  00:47, 25 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Never mind worked it out. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  01:19, 25 March 2017 (UTC)

Source review
All sources seem of encyclopedic quality and are sourced consistently and appropriate, with the following quibble:
 * In ref 12, although the title is in Spanish, should the species name be italicised?
 * That's it.--Wehwalt (talk) 13:48, 27 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Not the nominator, but seems to me that like with the English common name, the genus name is incorporated in the Spanish common name, and would therefore appear not to be italicised. FunkMonk (talk) 14:00, 27 March 2017 (UTC)
 * At second look at the actual linked page, no, they write the entire binomial, but the specific name is incorrectly capitalised, and they have no italics on their page. FunkMonk (talk) 14:02, 27 March 2017 (UTC)


 * If you follow through to the pdf it is correctly italicized but incorrectly capitalised, I have changed my citation to match. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  17:20, 27 March 2017 (UTC)

Sarastro1 (talk) 21:44, 27 March 2017 (UTC)
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