Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of World Heritage Sites in Pakistan/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:26, 30 June 2023 (UTC).

List of World Heritage Sites in Pakistan

 * Nominator(s): Tone 15:29, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Pakistan has six World Heritage Sites and 26 sites on the tentative list. The style is standard. The current nomination about the WHS in the US is already seeing some support, so I am adding a new nomination. Tone 15:29, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

AK

 * "accepted the convention" ratified instead?
 * Ratified reads fine, indeed. I was using both formulations in the previous articles.
 * Our article on the IVC seems to capitalize "Civilisation".
 * "steep hill it remained" → "steep hill, it remained "
 * Link Isa Khan.
 * The article leads to another person, the tomb belongs to Isa Khan Hussain who does not have an article.
 * "during its history, the extant monuments" missing a conjunction.
 * Link gunpowder era.
 * "The mosque" → "This mosque", also for next entry.
 * "built in" → "built from"?
 * I think this is fine.
 * That's all I can find. If you have the time, I would appreciate a review of my FLC nom. AryKun (talk) 11:59, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Fixed, thanks! Will have a look at the birds article now. --Tone 13:44, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Support. AryKun (talk) 12:32, 3 May 2023 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * "with about one third of the city being explored so far" => "with about one third of the city having been explored so far"
 * "Taxila, which was inhabited already in the Neolithic" => "Taxila, which was already inhabited in the Neolithic"
 * "The site was already abandoned in the mid-3rd millennium BCE, before the urbanised phase of the Indus Valley civilisation" - "civilisation" had a capital C earlier.......?
 * "It was a centre of a thriving Jain community who was active" => "It was a centre of a thriving Jain community which was active"
 * Think that's it :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 16:08, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Fixed all, thanks! Tone 16:49, 2 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:58, 2 May 2023 (UTC)

Comments from N Oneemuss

 * You spell "Shalimar" in two different ways in the description of the Fort and Shalimar Gardens in Lahore
 * For the Archaeological Site of Ranigat, I think it should say "stupas, shrines, and secular buildings" in the description
 * For the description of the Mansehra Rock Edicts, I would write "of the Mauryan Emperor Ashoka"
 * For the Hingol Cultural Landscape, you start the description with "Hinglaj Mata mandir", when the source seems to say "Hinglaj Mata Mandar"?
 * For the Karez System Cultural Landscape, I would start the description with "A karez, kariz, or qanat"
 * In the description of the Deosai National Park I think it would look better to do the unit conversion as: 3500 to 5200 m

Otherwise everything looks good! N Oneemuss (talk to me · see my edits · email me) 17:49, 24 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Fixed, thank you for checking! For the Mandar/mandir, here I used the name the WP article uses to avoid confusion. I think this is easier for the reader, especially because it is not the title of the site, in which case I would probably have added an explanation to the description. Tone 08:58, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Great, happy to support N Oneemuss (talk to me · see my edits · email me) 11:46, 25 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Source review – Formatting and reliability of the sourcing look okay and no dead links were found by the link-checker tool. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 21:19, 29 June 2023 (UTC)

Promoting. -- Pres N  00:02, 30 June 2023 (UTC)


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