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Natalie Wood filmography[edit]

Featured list candidates/Natalie Wood filmography/archive1

Nominator(s): Cowlibob (talk) 10:45, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Natalie Wood was an American actress known for her roles in Rebel Without a Cause, Splendor in the Grass, and West Side Story. This is a list which covers her film and television career. As always I welcome constructive comments on how to improve it. Cowlibob (talk) 10:45, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Jimknut (talk) 16:36, 3 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

; Suggestions by Jimknut

"Natalie Wood (1938–1981) was an American actress who started her career by appearing in films directed by Irving Pichel as a child." → "Natalie Wood (1938–1981) was an American actress who started her career as a child by appearing in films directed by Irving Pichel." (As you have it now it seems like Pichel was a child and not Wood.)
"Wood's first credited role was as an Austrian war refugee in Pichel-directed Tomorrow Is Forever (1946) with Claudette Colbert and Orson Welles." → "Wood's first credited role was as an Austrian war refugee in the Pichel-directed Tomorrow Is Forever (1946) with Claudette Colbert and Orson Welles." (or "Wood's first credited role was as an Austrian war refugee in Pichel's Tomorrow Is Forever (1946) with Claudette Colbert and Orson Welles." I think this one is better.)
"Wood appeared in the television sitcom The Pride of the Family (1953)." → "In 1953, Wood appeared as a regular cast member in the television sitcom The Pride of the Family (1953)."
"The following year, Wood appeared as a kidnapped girl in the John Ford-directed western The Searchers (1956) with John Wayne, and Jeffrey Hunter." → There is no need for a comma after John Wayne's name.
"She followed West Side Story with another musical film Gypsy, in which she played the title role of the burlesque entertainer Gypsy Rose Lee, for which she was nominated for the Golden Globe Award for Best Actress – Motion Picture Comedy or Musical." → You have "in which" and "for which" in the same sentence. I suggest you break this down into two sentences.
The notes column in the filmography has only four entries. Two say "uncredited" and two say "cameo". Unless you're planning to add more notes at a later date, I suggest putting these in paratheses after the names of the characters she played and then remove the notes column. Jimknut (talk) 19:51, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Jimknut: Thanks for your review. I've made changes to fix the above. Cowlibob (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support — Jimknut (talk) 14:23, 8 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I endorse all of Jimknut's comments and don't really have anything further to add -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 15:51, 2 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@ChrisTheDude: Thanks for your comment, I've made changes per above. Cowlibob (talk) 10:02, 3 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 11:09, 3 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from MWright96 (talk) 12:33, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from MWright96

The images would benefit from Alt text
The extra space at the end of the first sentence in the first paragraph is unneeded
"she played a child who doesn't believe in Santa Claus"- does not; no contractions please per MOS:CONTRACTION
Does Christmas really need to be wikilinked?
"She followed West Side Story with another musical film Gypsy," - I believe the year for the film mentioned in this sentence needs to be mentioned
"Two years later, she died during the filming" - Perhaps add she died of drowning as stated in the Time source
References 3, 9, 18 & 63 is missing the publication date
Reference 33 is missing the author/editor(s)
Reference 75 is missing the newspaper field
Wikilink The Indianapolis News to Indianapolis News

MWright96 (talk) 11:33, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Thanks for your review. I think I've sorted the above. Unfortunately the Variety reviews from back then are a bit hit and miss with giving full publication dates and those labelled as December 31 are likely to be "placeholders" so have simply replaced those with the year of publication.Cowlibob (talk) 09:56, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support – MWright96 (talk) 12:33, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Birdienest81

There is unnecessary space between the word "Pichel" and the period in the first sentence.
That's all I can find know. I will continue to proofread the list.

--Birdienest81 (talk) 11:42, 16 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Birdienest81: Thanks for your review. Sorted above. Cowlibob (talk) 09:56, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from ~ HAL333 10:54, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

;Comments

The only thing that I could find which hasn't been mentioned is the use of "with" in the lede. To diversify it you could replace a few with "opposite". For example, she starred as a recalcitrant teenager in Rebel Without a Cause with James Dean would become she starred as a recalcitrant teenager in Rebel Without a Cause opposite James Dean or maybe she starred as a recalcitrant teenager opposite James Dean in Rebel Without a Cause. That's not even really necessary if you don't want to change it. Nice work. Pretty informative, never realized that was Wood in The Searchers. ~ HAL333 04:15, 26 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@HAL333: Thanks for the comment. I've included some "opposites" into the lead. Cowlibob (talk) 09:08, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support Well done. ~ HAL333 10:54, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review – The reliability and formatting of the sources look fine overall, and the link-checker shows no issues. The source review has been passed. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:22, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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