Wikipedia:Peer review/2008 Summer Olympics/archive2

2008 Summer Olympics
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to take it to FAC
 * Previous peer review

Thanks in advance,  NickGibson3900 Talk 03:44, 29 September 2014 (UTC)


 * I suggest you directly take it to FAC since there is no response. But since I am here, I will just review a bit: "Media coverage" section, last paragraph, last sentence, I do not know whether the YouTube external links in the main text is appropriate. HYH.124 (talk) 09:19, 23 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Tag or talkback me if you require further peer reviews or a response from me. HYH.124 (talk) 09:19, 23 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Also, I noticed that citation 12 has its access date as "July 295, 2012". This obviously isn't right, so I looked back and found that it should be July 29 (no 5) and corrected it.
 * Be sure to check out the automated peer review as well. It commented about American vs. British English, citations after punctuation (such as "NOCs[b]," in the first paragraph of the lead - [b] should come after the comma), and some dead links in the references. Be sure those all get fixed before nominating for FA. http://dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/view/Peer_reviewer#page:2008_Summer_Olympics
 * Tonystewart14 (talk) 01:58, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) Hope that's helpful, and good luck! &mdash; Cirt (talk) 17:47, 25 October 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 2) Checklinks tool shows several problems throughout with dead links and slow links. I strongly suggest archiving as many as possible with added parameters archiveurl= and archivedate= with Internet Archive links.
 * 3) Uncited sentence at end of sect Olympic and world records.
 * 4) A few one-sentence-long-paragraphs and other short paragraphs throughout, you may wish to consider expanding and/or merging them up.
 * 5) Entire paragraph uncited at end of Venues sect. Including direct quotations uncited. That's a major issue.
 * 6) Remove hyperlink in direct body text in last paragraph of Media coverage sect, instead use a citation please.
 * 7) Consider moving portal links to bottom and using Portal bar and expanding with a few other additional relevant portals as well.
 * 8) First two notes, A and B, in Notes sect, are completely uncited. This is a major problem.
 * 9) Consider using less images in article. 13 total images used. That's a lot for an image reviewer to do a full thorough image review at FAC.
 * 10) NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!