Wikipedia:Peer review/Aaron Rodgers/archive3

Aaron Rodgers
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to see what needs to be improved before a possible GA nomination. I've done a lot of work over the years with it but I'm not even sure where to start.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks,  Church  Talk 06:01, 16 August 2016 (UTC)


 * I've never done a peer review before so don't expect anything too fancy. Just a few comments. I gave the article a good once-over and did some edits.
 * I added citation needed tags to statements for which references would likely be requested if the article was to be GA reviewed. As such, I was pretty strict with my tagging. Although the tags do dwindle down later in the article, mostly because I think the 2011–2015 part of the article needs a complete re-write from scratch. On that:
 * The article suffers from major WP:CRUFT, especially the 2014 season. Readers aren't interested in a game-by-game breakdown. There's also too much on the Packers and not enough on Rodgers. This is an article for Aaron Rodgers, not 2014 Green Bay Packers season. It appears a fan or someone else (or multiple elses) followed along during the season and came in and added a bit about each game. This is also evident with how choppy the prose is, e.g. "Rodgers did this. Rodgers did that. Rodgers broke a record. Rodgers ate a waffle."
 * Appears to be lots of original research. If the text reads "Rodgers had a great year, as he passed for xxxx yards." and the reference is to a cite that merely shows stats, that's original research. No amount of yards is inherently equal to a "great year." Free thought and conclusion-reaching is not allowed here.
 * There are more inline citations for the fact that Rodgers graduated high school than there are in the last five seasons combined of his NFL career. Not sure what to say about that.
 * Anyway, hope I could help. Lizard  (talk) 01:03, 17 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Definitely good advice all away around, I have begun a complete rewrite of the 2011-2015 sections in which I plan to make the article about the player, not the team. This can be found at User:Church/Aaron Rodgers Rewrite Thanks for taking the time to review this.-- Church  Talk 20:53, 17 August 2016 (UTC)