Wikipedia:Peer review/Andrew Jackson/archive1

Andrew Jackson
Very detailed article and of course would like to further improve it. -- Wikipedical 07:02, 21 January 2006 (UTC)
 * Not specifically my area of expertise but the article seems rather more glowing than I'd expect. Jackson has faced considerable criticism recently for Indian Removal and the spoils system, and even during his time over the National Bank, but those sections seem to spend single sentences on this aspect. A documentation of a more critical POV needs to be incorporated into the article as well. There's not much in the way of the "polarizing figure" that the intro promises. Also, wording like "the irate redcoat slashed" and "the ripe old age of" is much too coloquial and charged, and should be rooted out. The notes section should be moved to the bottom, above References. "Physical characteristics and health" should go nearer the top (bottom is couterintuitive) and be cleaned up; much of it appears trivial to me. The intro could stand for expansion, as well. Hope this is helpful Dmcdevit·t 08:26, 21 January 2006 (UTC)
 * At first glance, it seems to me that this article is in great need of re-organization. The entire "Presidency" category seems to be a large lump of tidbits that need to be expanded upon (and some, like the bit about the 1824 election, also need to be re-categorized).  I'd like to see more information on what Jackson did in terms of policy during his presidency, instead of a series of events.  Perhaps the "Presidency" section should be split into a section for important events and a section for policies.
 * The "Physical Characteristics and Health" section should definitely be at the beginning of the article, not the bottom.
 * Changed. -- Wikipedical 23:46, 29 January 2006 (UTC)
 * I think this article needs to be re-categorized desperately; after that happens, it shouldn't be too hard to see the gaps in the article. --DMurphy 20:57, 24 January 2006 (UTC)


 * I like the idea of splitting the page into "first term" and "second term," but right now there's no second term section. Also, the 1824 stuff should be in the section above the First Term section.  And the article really does have some holes in it - nothing at all on the Petticoat Affair other than a link to it in the Later Life section, and also very little about The Hermitage.  I'd like to see some info on his physical characteristics that's actually confirmed by another source too.  --DMurphy 14:39, 30 January 2006 (UTC)
 * I've been trying to seperate the middle chunk of the article into both terms, but this will take some time. It's in process.  --  Wikipedical 04:10, 2 February 2006 (UTC)