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Anfield

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I believe with a few modifications the article could be close to featured standard, anyway let's see what you think. Cheers NapHit (talk) 19:11, 23 July 2009 (UTC) Only got five minutes of my lunch break left, but I'll make a start...... Back to work now, more to follow........... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:32, 29 July 2009 (UTC) Back as promised..... Will pop back and do the rest later, hope I've helped so far -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:29, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * All-seater stadium doesn't need to be linked twice in the lead, I'd lose it completely in the opening sentence in fact
 * "a brewer and friend of fellow brewer" sounds very clunky, although I can't think how to re-word it right now
 * "Everton F.C." and "Everton FC" used in the same para - be consistent
 * "at the time playing host" - comma needed after "time"
 * Double full stop after Accrington F.C.
 * This culminated with Everton F.C. moving to Goodison Park, Houlding was left with an empty stadium" - comma is not appropriate here, it should be a new sentence
 * You have Lancashire League (football) piped as simply "league", I would suggest the name of the actual league should be shown or the wikilink removed altogether
 * "with Liverpool winning" - with......ing should be avoided at all costs
 * "A new stand was constructed in 1895......and was built on the site of the present Main Stand" - "and was built" not needed
 * Three very short sentences make up "After Liverpool had won their second League Championship....Boer War in 1900" - I suggest the middle one be merged with one of the other two
 * Also, I don't think Championship needs a capital C
 * "Local journalist.....local newspapers" - only need to state "local" once
 * Don't put "all standing" in brackets
 * Liverpool County Football Association could be wikilinked
 * "ripped down" sounds a bit unencyclopedic, maybe just say "demolished"
 * "adopted as the Club's anthem" - no need for capital on club
 * "tributes to the 96 people who died at Hillsborough." - maybe a tad pedantic, but not all 96 actually died at Hillsborough, maybe reword to "died as a result of the disaster"
 * "Main stand" is shown at least twice with the S uncapitalised
 * "directors box and the players dressing rooms" - apostrophes missing after both directors and players
 * "their design includes the three European Cups, Paisley won during his tenure" - no need for that comma
 * Scottish is spelt wrong in the bit about the Shankly Gates
 * "There is another tribute to Shankly, a statue of him is located at the visitors' centre in front of the Kop." - poorly worded, plus you already mentioned it so no need to do so again
 * "the groundsman are assisted" - grammatically incorrect