Wikipedia:Peer review/B. R. Ambedkar/archive1

B. R. Ambedkar
Hi - I request the help and advice of all in making this article an FA. Rama's arrow 17:02, 2 August 2006 (UTC)
 * From a brief read - just a comment on the referencing and citations
 * Needs more inline citations particularly for the Criticism and legacy and Architect of India's constitution sections.
 * All of the current inline citations are to one online document and it would be better if the texts in Further Reading where referenced to assertions in the text.


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 01:28, 9 August 2006 (UTC)


 * Review by Aksi_great (talk - review me)


 * Just had a glance at the article. My first comment is that the entire list "His Writings and Speeches" is too long. Why are some of them bolded and some not. Wouldn't it be better to move the complete list to a sub-article and just state the really important works here. And why not just add the link to this at the beginning of the section for anyone interested for complete text of the works. The individual links are very distracting. Will review the body of the text later. - Aksi_great (talk - review me) 07:49, 13 August 2006 (UTC)


 * The writings and speeches is the most important section. No one can decide which is the most important work. The objective here is not to rank order but to give a reader complete information. I can rank but that would be POV. Note that this is a biographical article and has little meaning if it does not even have a list of writings and speeches properly linked. If its too long, so be it. You can format it into a table of two coloums if you like. It will reduce the length to half. My idea is to later add a synopsis to each of the writings. Yeditor 11:55, 19 August 2006 (UTC)


 * As is, the collection in the section "His Writings and Speeches" must go per Wikipedia policy: Wikipedia is not a mirror or a repository of links, images, or media files and Wikipedia is not an indiscriminate collection of information. Medtopic 04:53, 21 August 2006 (UTC)

"In 1926, he became a nominated member of the Bombay Legislative Council, and led a satyagraha — non-violent protest and civil disobedience as pioneered by Mahatma Gandhi — in Madh to fight for the right "
 * in section "Fight against untouchability"


 * Please get confirmed whether the referred place was "Madh" or "Mahad" (in marathi language 'महाड'),


 * Please get confirmed spelling of a Princly states kings surname referred here in this article "gaekwad" (I do not know Gujarathi pronounciation but in Marathi pronounciation may be spelled "Gayakwad" 'गायकवाड')


 * "who is the chief architect of the Indian constitution. "


 * What is grammaticaly correct 'is or was' ?


 * Ambedkar's ancestors had for long been in the employ of the army of the British East India Company,


 * May be here author wants to reffer family's traditional occupation for certain generations.'employ or employment'


 * Name of 'Maharaja of Kolhapur' is not mentioned.


 * Positive aspects of his legacy has room for further coverage.In modern India his legacy has yeilded an acceptance for his social cause from entire political spectrum.


 * Positive successes of his legacy in upliftment of down troden communities has not been adequetly covered.


 * There is no mention or links to political aspects after him specialy so about Republican Party.


 * Primarily article seems ok.I do not have specific experties to confirm all facts and refferences.Sentences are lenghthy could have been devided in shorter ones for readers benefit.


 * 'Vis s Vis Mahatma Gandhi's philosphy of decentralised and stronger local and rural democratic institutions, Dr.B.R.Ambedkar ensured a centralised stronger provincial and union democratic institutions and governments.'This was to ensure more equal treatment from local polity and avoid discreminations.


 * Article does not cover mainstream political thought that indian untouchability was different from the way west percives 'racism'.Many non-Indian scholors may be interested in understanding this aspect.


 * Connotation (meaning) of'Untouchable' may be different to readers of Non Indian background is it adequetly explained inthe article it-self.


 * Links for princly states or princes may be given.

Mahitgar 12:18, 28 August 2006 (UTC)