Wikipedia:Peer review/Emoticon/archive1

Emoticon
This is a fairly comprehensive article. I think it should be a featured article. Just need you guys input on what changes need to be made to this article before its ready -- Mercenary2k 02:50, 8 March 2006 (UTC)

There is a fair amount of interesting info here, but it is hampered by lack of organisation and uninspiring prose. Here are a few comments:


 * The introduction states a fact regarding the etymology that is not backed up with any reference to an authority. This flaw is repeated throughout the article.
 * The subheading "Internet usage" within History doesn't really fit. It has never not been part of the Internet. I think it would be better to discuss the progression from ASCII to images. The stuff about converting ASCII to images could be moved to the end Graphical emoticons section.
 * The Purposes section is too short and repeats stuff from the intro. Just move this text to other bits.
 * Western Style. Is the reader so dumb that they need to be taught how to view an emoticon? By all means mention that they are meant to be viewed sideways but don't teach.
 * Basic Examples. This section begins "The following examples" but doesn't include any examples and is followed by a section at the same level covering Variants. This whole section contains unsubstatianted statements such as "often" and "lately". Really?
 * Variants. The bit on the patent is worth its own section and doesn't belong in this section. The last sentence in this section is a mess and has weasel words.
 * The organision of the text that discusses variations could be improved. There is repetition. Why not have a grouping discussing variant eyes, noses, mouths, foreheads, etc.
 * Head and hands emoticons. The examples in the section contradict the section title and the intro sentence.

Colin°Talk 14:03, 8 March 2006 (UTC)