Wikipedia:Peer review/Fashion design/archive1

Fashion design
Another user suggested this article might have the potential to become a Good Article. I've been doing a fair amount of editing on this page for the past two or three months, and I think it's a relatively decent article, though maybe a little too long and focused on history(?). Anyway, I wondered if anyone might have an opinion on how it could be improved and if it has any potential. Carmelita 18:15, 15 November 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 23:22, 15 November 2006 (UTC)


 * Most obviously, there are no inline citations in the article (see WP:FOOTNOTE). I would put the history straight after the lead (which could do with being expanded a little) rather than launching straight into a list. "Types of Fashion" could do with an introductory sentence rather than just a list of 3, and it should preferably clarify if those 3 are the only types, or just the main types. The history is also very long and perhaps could be trimmed a bit, although I don't know enough to judge if it's all necessary. Trebor 17:35, 17 November 2006 (UTC)


 * OK! I'll try and rewrite the lead and "Types of Fashion". I'll probably have to trim down the history section too, in order to add any inline citations, since it's so long the article just cuts off whenever I try to add citations. Thanks. Carmelita 14:37, 19 November 2006 (UTC)