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Goodison Park
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to see neutral feedback.

Thanks, TheBigJagielka (talk) 13:44, 16 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Comments by Oldelpaso

My first impressions are positive. The article seems comprehensive, and sourcing wise it passes the Inglis test. Brief comments from a quick run through:


 * There are a few run-on sentences that need splitting or rewording (try saying "It has hosted more top-flight games than any other stadium in England and has hosted the maximum possible number of Premier League games as Everton have never been relegated from that division." aloud)
 * Later in the history there are a number of one or two sentence paragraphs, which disrupts the flow. Achieving a narrative feel can be damn hard, but fortunately there is some good advice at User:Tony1/How_to_satisfy_Criterion_1a.
 * I'm not convinced of the need for the fair-use images given that there are several free use images in the article.
 * External links should not appear in the prose.
 * A graph of average attendances could perhaps be included, like the one in Portman Road.
 * Before the all-seating regulations were introduced some fans would climb up and watch a football game from the church rooftop. - misleading, makes it sound like it was specifically prohibited by the Taylor Report or something.
 * As Goodison is a ground featuring Leitch architecture, it might be worth seeing if your local library has a copy of Engineering Archie, a book about the structures he created, for source material.

Hope this helps. If you would like further comments drop a note on my talk page. Oldelpaso (talk) 16:07, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Tim riley I've corrected two typos ("Eveton" and "leveled"). Sorry not to be able to add anything more substantial. - Tim riley (talk) 13:54, 12 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Though I am not a soccer fan I enjoyed reading this article. Two tiny pedantic questions about consistency within the article:
 * Orrell or Orrel? Both are used. (Having grown up in Orrell Park I have a prejudice in favour of the former.)
 * St Lukes or St Luke's? Better with the apostrophe, I'd say.