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Kingdom Hearts III
I've listed this article for peer review because it has been in development for many years and is still not coming out yet, and the other Kingdom Hearts game articles are nearly ready for a Good or Featured Topic nomination. So this needs a peer review!

Thanks, Judgesurreal777 (talk) 13:51, 8 July 2016 (UTC)

My only concern is that the current article uses too many quotes. I have often been criticized for doing that. Also, I would remove Sora's new outfit big quote with another more important for an article.Tintor2 (talk) 02:05, 10 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I think that's definitely do-able. If Judge doesn't get to this, I'll definitely work on cutting back the quotes. I also have ideas to remove the Sora's outfit quote and work into the section, outside of using the quote box. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 06:06, 10 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I've reduced the amount of quotes in the article. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 04:05, 18 July 2016 (UTC)


 * Dev section could have less dateline. Connect the events in narrative form instead of plopping them next to each other in "In year X, happened Y" format Eye close font awesome.svg czar  04:10, 17 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I read through the section and didn't really see a way to avoid that. After the first paragraph, all the content included is important to know when it was said/revealed/announced etc for context on what was being said. I'm open to suggestions for fixing it if you have thoughts. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 03:44, 18 July 2016 (UTC)
 * example of edits: remove passive voice, reduce redundancy in the sentence, remove extraneous detail that detracts from a generalist overview also lede can stand to be significantly expanded Eye close font awesome.svg czar  00:48, 21 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I worked on the lead, and adjusted the proseline a bit more. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 02:36, 21 July 2016 (UTC)
 * If you want to take any critiques on this article that would be awesome, I have a full plate at the moment :) Judgesurreal777 (talk) 20:43, 20 July 2016 (UTC)


 * The refs in the infobox seem unnecessary (see WP:INFOBOXREF), as a infobox gives a quick overview of the article. soetermans . ↑↑↓↓←→←→ B A TALK 12:31, 29 July 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ - Favre1fan93 (talk) 19:18, 29 July 2016 (UTC)


 * I have closed this peer review due to inactivity. It has been unedited for over a month.  Anarchyte  ( work  &#124;  talk )   13:00, 9 September 2016 (UTC)