Wikipedia:Peer review/Michael Jackson/archive2

Michael Jackson
This is a new peer review. We've attempted to respond to problems with the article, and this has in itself brought out a new list of problems. Please take a look at the article and say what you think.--Manboobies 02:47, 3 May 2006 (UTC)
 * the section titles are pretty long- how about "Early Career" instead of "Jackson's Early Career etc." Obviously it's Jackson's career, the article is about him.
 * you might consider separating his musical achievements and personal life. It can be difficult but might make the article flow easier, something like (1) music (a) early (b) solo (c) recent; (2) personal life (a) marriage (b) lawsuits - that kind of thing.  Kaisershatner 16:35, 3 May 2006 (UTC)

I'd like to see this article as TFA.. please let me know how it can be improved.. Σαι ( Talk ) 15:19, 14 January 2008 (UTC)


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