Wikipedia:Peer review/Ostracism/archive1

Ostracism
I have rewritten the article on the entry on the Athenian practice of ostracism which had been puddling along for years with minor edits and uncorrected errors. A lot of classical entries in WP are either reprints of 1911 Britannica entries or need major revision (French and German WP are a long way ahead in this area). (I came back and shortened this request) Any comments?

I know it is calling out for a picture. Flounderer 13:22, 5 October 2005 (UTC)


 * It looks good to me. About the only addition I could think of would be some type of summary of known ostracisms. The FA folks will probably want the article documented with reference tags. Thanks. :) &mdash; RJH 16:22, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

Thanks for that. I'll add the list. I take it ref. tag = footnote. Flounderer 22:37, 5 October 2005 (UTC)


 * A pic, as you say, is definitely needed. Great overview otherwise but just a couple of things to suggest:
 * 1) The Procedure section could be split as it tends to veer into comparative comments.
 * 2) Without making it internally redundant, purpose should be mentioned earlier.
 * 3) Their is inconsistency in the use of the full stop(.) particularly in sentences that end with a bracketed comment.
 * 4) A lot of red links. Marskell 16:35, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

Great suggestions. I was aware of the veering, but had decided it was more natural to leave it as it was. Will have another look. I'm wondering about the excess of red. Maybe I can set up some moderately plump stubs for them. Thanks Flounderer 22:37, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

The obvious suggestion for a pic would be one of ostraka, see if you can track down a museum with some and a wikipedian to take a piture for you. You could also have a picture of historic athens with a related caption like- the populace of Athens voted to ostracise members of their society, mabye a bust of a philosopher or tyrant with a related caption Aristotle wrote the most cited account of ostracism.--nixie 11:57, 6 October 2005 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the suggestions. I'm going to track down an archaeological friend and ask them. Flounderer 15:45, 6 October 2005 (UTC)