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S.S. Lazio

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to improve it.

Thanks,  A ndrea 93  (msg) 08:10, 7 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Comments from
 * The lead could be bulked up a bit - an article of this length could easily withstand a lead of twice the size, keep it to three or four paragraphs but make the paras larger.
 * I'm sorry, but I have not understand this point... -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 16:48, 12 June 2008 (UTC)


 * WP:HEAD suggests "Current Squad" should be "Current squad".
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 16:44, 12 June 2008 (UTC)


 * The prose needs work - lots of single (or few) sentence paragraphs - merge them to improve the way it looks and reads. Check out other football featured articles for good examples.
 * Probably I'm not the ideal person to do this work. -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 16:44, 12 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Seems to use US English (e.g. organize instead of organise) when probably British English would make more sense (but that's not critical).
 * I'm sorry, but I have not understand also this point... -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 16:44, 12 June 2008 (UTC)


 * More references are essential. I took Ipswich Town F.C. to FA and had a lot less to talk about than there would be for Lazio, but I still had around 100 citations.
 * I'm working on... -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 07:14, 11 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Season delimiters should be en-dash instead of hyphen (e.g. 1900–01 instead of 1900-01).
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 07:12, 11 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Citations should be placed per WP:CITE, i.e. in general immediately after punctation if possible.
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 06:34, 11 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "May 16th, 1902" - see WP:DATE for correct formatting.
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 21:36, 10 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "Goran Pandev, one of the most important Lazio players today." - firstly it's a sentence fragment so remove the full stop. Secondly, who says he's one of the "most important" players?  POV.
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 21:31, 10 June 2008 (UTC)


 * What makes the players in the notable players list notable? POV.
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 21:25, 10 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Refs 8 and 9 appear identical so use ref name.
 * Done -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 21:23, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

That's a start for you. I would urge you to look at WP:FOOTBALL's list of feature club articles for suggestions on how to take this further. All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:08, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much. I will give my best. -- A ndrea 93  (msg) 21:18, 10 June 2008 (UTC)