Wikipedia:Peer review/Sergei Korolev/archive1

Sergei Korolev
A man who went from nearly dying in a Stalinist Gulag to head of the Soviet space program: his groups launched the first satellites and humans into space, landed Luna probes on the Moon, designed the first Russian ICBMs, &c. I've tried to update the page to do his story justice. Unfortunately at the moment there is only one really good source for this: the book by James Harford referenced near the bottom. All the web sites seem to give varying tales of his life. Anyway, any suggestions for improvements and some final polish? Thanks. &mdash; RJH 23:16, 1 Jun 2005 (UTC)


 * The lead could definately be expanded to summarise the content of the artilce. I didn't notice any major flaws otherwise, the language is overly flowery in places, for example The struggles continued until the triumph of the Soviets in 1920 , triumph is a bit flowery and to those who aren't intimately familiar with Russian history who the Soviets triumphed over isn't really clear either. You may want to write the honours section into prose. A lastly are there any pictures that could be used in the middle of the article? There are some more in the Russian version but they seem to be from later in his life too.--nixie 05:19, 2 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Thank you. The pictures of his earlier life appear to be from copyrighted sources, but I found one one the NASA site of SP in a glider. &mdash; RJH 17:05, 2 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Are you going to use a footnote system for inline citations?--nixie 03:30, 3 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Nope. At the moment there is really only one fairly solid English-language reference for this write-up. The remainder are in Russian. Sorry. &mdash; RJH 15:24, 3 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * No problem, just mention that in the FAC request, it'll save you from having to explain it there. --nixie 13:06, 4 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Thanks, but I'm not really into that whole FAC scene. I was just trying to turn it into a quality article, since he is an important figure. :-) I'll update the page as I find new references. (I did find another, actually, although it had less material.) &mdash; RJH 17:57, 8 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Regarding sources: I poked around a bit and found library catalog entries for two English translations of Russian biographies of Korolev:
 * Romanov, A. 1976. Spacecraft designer : the story of Sergei Korolev.
 * Golovanov, Yaroslav. 1975. Sergei Korolev : the apprenticeship of a space pioneer.
 * The U. of California catalog has both; the U. of Washington has #1; I'm sure other large research libraries will have them too... Great article, by the way.  CDC   (talk)  21:23, 15 Jun 2005 (UTC)