Wikipedia:Peer review/Winnipeg/archive2

Winnipeg
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it's a Good Article that I've been working on over the past few days and I'm looking for suggestions for further improvements, with an eye to potentially taking it through FAC.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Nikkimaria (talk) 08:01, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Comments by Canada Hky (talk) 15:56, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 * The lead seems really short for an article as long as this. I am not sure if the solution is to expand the lead, or to remove some of the excessive detail in the really short sections of the article.
 * The lead is repetitive: "Winnipeg's professional sports teams include..." and "Winnipeg's post-secondary institutions include...."  "The economy includes..."
 * One sentence paragraphs in the culture section and in a few other places. Very short paragraphs in general, not much flow when reading.
 * The culture section is really extensively subdivided, and the subdivisions are really short. It makes the article quite choppy.
 * In the references, some of the weblinked news articles have access dates, some don't. This should be consistent.
 * Hey Canada Hky, I think I've resolved all of these except for the length of the lead - I'm not sure what else could be added to that, as it seems to touch on every section already. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:29, 29 March 2014 (UTC)