Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Joachim von Ribbentrop

Joachim von Ribbentrop
Has been at B class for a while. Article seems complete and stable, and of a major historical figure. Shooting for GA class, would like to know if it qualifies for FA or what it needs to reach FA. -- &oelig; &trade; 03:47, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * To all who gave reviews, Thank you so much for the feedback. I will take each suggestion one by one and try to apply it to the article. This is my first attempt at trying to promote an article so it may take me some time but I eventually will implement all of your comments and hopefully get it to GA status. -- &oelig; &trade; 18:10, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

Abraham, B.S.
Just a few basic comments:
 * Endashes are required between date ranges used in the article, and page ranges used in citations.
 * Emdashes should replace general dashes used in the prose.
 * The lead requires an expansion to a good two or three paragrahs in order to briefly summarise the contents of the article.
 * "See also" sections should only contain links that are highly relevant to the article, but are also not linked to in the prose.
 * I am a little concerned by the high usage of Bloch 1992. Would it be possible to have a little more diversity in the cites?
 * I would recommend adding a military person section to the infobox, such as that used in Harold Alexander, 1st Earl Alexander of Tunis.
 * Images require alt text.
 * ✅ Except the video, I don't think it's doable or even necessary considering there's accompanying audio. -- &oelig; &trade; 04:56, 31 August 2009 (UTC)

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 04:43, 24 August 2009 (UTC)

Ian Rose

 * In addition to Bryce's comments above, try to avoid list cruft. This is particularly noticeable in the Family subsection.  You should use prose to mention his children and relations, and then only sparingly unless they are otherwise notable, such as Rudolf.
 * Though obviously a lot of work has gone into referencing, there are still entire paragraphs missing citations, most notably in the Trial and Execution section.
 * You can probably afford to remove the article length tag in Foreign Minister of the Reich, however the next three sections (until Declining Influence) really should be broken up with subsections if they're to retain that level of detail.
 * Are there no other public domain pictures that could break up the sections as well?
 * The preceding comments are for GA as well as FA; if going for FA, you'll certainly need to add alt text to each image. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:01, 24 August 2009 (UTC)

YellowMonkey
 YellowMonkey  ( bananabucket ) 00:33, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Depictions in pop culture needs to be moved into another article and gotten rid off
 * Need to choose between "page" and "p" in the notes