Talk:Adam Murray/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:39, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
Comments
- "17-year" should be hyphenated.
- I would expand U20 on the first mention.
- Link promotion.
- "and Football Conference." vs "Conference National"?
- "play-offs in 2005" probably ought to have the whole lot in the pipe.
- Could link captain.
- "much of his 97" many, not much.
- Could link "loan".
- Is there a link for caretaker?
- Link substitute.
- "1998–99 season" etc etc, put the "season" inside the pipe.
- Could link "manager".
- "Derby would be relegated" avoid the "would be" and stick with "were".
- "Murray would feature only" ditto, -> "Murray featured irregularly"
- "for the "Stags", " avoid these unexplained nicknames.
- Link "sending off".
- "after a tough spell battling alcohol addiction" bit tabloidy.
- "overcame this battle" ditto.
- "transfer-listed" is there a link?
- "helping the "Cumbrians" to qualify" again, no unsourced/unexplained nicknames.
- "of the 2006–07 League One season" this is confusing linking.
- "; "Gulls" manager" see above.
- "for the "Silkmen"" etc. Not mentioning it again.
- "a virtual ever-present" what is that?? "nearly ever-present"??
- "A back operation caused Murray" maybe "Following an operation on his back, Murray..."?
- "but he now saw Wilder as one of the best manager in " -> "but now saw him as one of the best managers in "
- "Hatters", but departed" probably "and" rather than "but".
- "20 miles from" convert.
- Link extra time.
- "to qualify for the play-offs" is there a link?
- "red carded" hyphen.
- Link player-manager.
- "with energy and tenacity whose natural talent" according to whom??
- "later at Field Mill, was" overlinked.
- Any link for "free transfer"?
- "After a successful month" more like two weeks??!
- "in 21st-place" no hyphen required.
- "in 15th-place and" again. Not mentioning this again.
- "at Burton Albion.[103]" Burton is overlinked.
- "to assist Valérien Ismaël" no need to repeat his first name.
- "is known as a manager with an eye for detail" according to whom??
- "Karl Hawley was" who he?
- Fix all the spaced hyphens (should be en-dashes)
- Consistent BBC Sport or just BBC Sport.
That's enough to be getting on with. On hold. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:08, 1 May 2022 (UTC)