Talk:The Boat Race 1912

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Ritchie333 (talk · contribs) 11:50, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A boat race with a sinking? Game on! Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 11:50, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

  • "The 69th Boat Race took place on 30 March and 1 April 1912" - I can't think of a better way of phrasing it, but this might give the impression the race was a two day event, as opposed to one that was abandoned and restarted.
    Thinking about this one .... The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Worth mentioning it was Oxford's fourth win in a row?
    Sure, done. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Background[edit]

  • "as of 2015, broadcast worldwide" - any particular reason for using 2015 instead of 2014 (the date of the source). "As of 2014" implies all years following, doesn't it?
    This is true. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Crews[edit]

Race[edit]

  • Sidney Swann has already be mentioned in the prose for "Crews", so should simply be "Swann" here
    Ok, done. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Oxford won the toss" (2nd mention) - would it be worth adding "again" to this?
    Yep. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with the Dark Blues made the better start and took advantage" - this isn't grammatically correct
    Reworded. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 29 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Summary[edit]